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FarmerOfBrilliance

FarmerOfBrilliance

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I'm a young boy tryna get famous.I hope i have talent for this :)

2021-07-04 Joined Guyana

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Commented

review this paragraph too much 'and' and put a full stop (.) before 'Everything.

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Fantasy · Justin_Gabventure

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All the maidens in the Empire had their eyes on him. He was a young married prodigy, just shy of reaching twenty-three years of age when he settled down to start a family with a mortal woman.

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Fantasy · Justin_Gabventure

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His father was a good man and many people knew him

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Fantasy · Justin_Gabventure

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They should do something more ant-like.Maybe clapping their mandables together to replicate clapping sounds to show they agree would be more fitting.

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Fantasy · An_Average_Author

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If you gonna make this an proper novel about ants then you should change your vocabulary.Its no longer children as that is a word that is used for humans.Brood is the name of the children of ants

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Fantasy · An_Average_Author

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The speech shall commence seems redudant.You could say that its a meeting,a council?

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Fantasy · An_Average_Author

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I got up from my half-slouched body. I think u should see the problem there. A more appropiate wording would be My half slouched body got up

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Fantasy · An_Average_Author

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Replied to Omali_Bart

I'll fix it right away

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Games · FarmerOfBrilliance

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bro u scared me when i read this didnt expect you'd do it

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