The first chapters were great! I love how you describe the characters' appearance and how they feel. But there are some mispelled words. There is also something that you should avoid, which is repeating words. I've read a part where you repeated the color of a character's eyes twice or maybe even more, so I think you should change that. Overall, its good. I'll be waiting for some development about the problems I said. And also, goodluck on your writing journey!💞
Urban · AuthorAthena
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The first chapters were great! I love how you describe the characters' appearance and how they feel. But there are some mispelled words. There is also something that you should avoid, which is repeating words. I've read a part where you repeated the color of a character's eyes twice or maybe even more, so I think you should change that. Overall, its good. I'll be waiting for some development about the problems I said. And also, goodluck on your writing journey!💞
A Shy Girl's Alluring Love
Urban · AuthorAthena