Read too much like a script versus a novel. Grammar needs to be improved. Proper use of quotation marks. Got through about 4 chapters, but character interactions need to be flushed out more. Character description, motivation, and world description. Has a lot of potential though and if properly nurtured could be a hidden gem.
Fantasy · Khaliq_Williams
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Read too much like a script versus a novel. Grammar needs to be improved. Proper use of quotation marks. Got through about 4 chapters, but character interactions need to be flushed out more. Character description, motivation, and world description. Has a lot of potential though and if properly nurtured could be a hidden gem.
THE GRANDMASTER
Fantasy · Khaliq_Williams