I am an aspiring author and a very boring person.
2021-08-04 Joined United Kingdom
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Sci-fi · MagnanimousMaestro
I didn't know that, I was focused on getting the point across,my bad
"EW! THATS CREEPY!" Alex woke up in a bed with a grin on his face and realized that all of that was just a dream. He looked around and glanced at his surroundings. He saw that there was one other bed on his left and a huge TV hanging on the wall opposite him. On the bed to his left is someone with brown hair and green eyes and freckles with a disgusted look on his face, "What Connor?"
Sci-fi · MagnanimousMaestro
an on point and concise review
you should try to avoid long sentences
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Sci-fi · KingCristo
so far, the world building, and the writing quality is good, just don't forget to go over the grammatical errors
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Sci-fi · KingCristo
I centered it on mobile, but on monitor its on the side idk what to do
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Sci-fi · MagnanimousMaestro
I will take that into account, thank you.
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Sci-fi · MagnanimousMaestro
I will expand my vocab got it
ch 0 6 New memories
Sci-fi · MagnanimousMaestro
Yes and to avoid that kinda mistake I will review all the chapters in translate and listen
ch 0 5 Lost memories
Sci-fi · MagnanimousMaestro
Will do.
ch 0 3 Escape
Sci-fi · MagnanimousMaestro
OK, I will take that into account, I will make the sentences shorter and more paragraphs so they eyes can rest
ch 0 2 A bad dream
Sci-fi · MagnanimousMaestro
The reason is explained in the next chapter but I am working on the synopsis
ch 0 1 Prologue
Sci-fi · MagnanimousMaestro
that is good btw
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Sci-fi · Ozymandias007i
Overall, it's a 5 star imo, the worldbuilding is nice and the first chapter sets a tone for the rest of the story, the characters are fleshed out and have their own personalities, the only problem I had was the grammar which can be easily fixed
king of the arctic
War · noble_history_man