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I think you meant "to 18H" and not "too 18H"
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I don't know if "whole of today" is an error or a valid expression, but I sure don't know it, and it seems odd
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I think you meant "while look*ing* down"
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I think you forgot to erase the "climbed on top of it", because now it spells "climbed it climbed on top of it like a cat"
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I think you meant "running like *a* beast"
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Sorry to be always so negative about, an otherwise great story, but wouldn't it be better to not repeat "absurdly" in this paragraph. You could maybe replace one of them with an "extremely" or "gigantic"
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I think you forgot the "head" in "she lowered her *head*, which was covered..."
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furthermore, I don't know if you meant "twister form" or "twisted shape"
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I think you meant "replacing *it* with her..."
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isn't it written like so: "that he gave up 2 turns"
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Ye but like... A paper plane... C'mon...
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I agree with you editor's thought: It is better that way
ch 182 At the mercy of yourself
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Ameless is just killing his eagle, treating him like that. Because every baby bird needs to be fed pre-chewed food, because they can't chew. So, if I was pointy and annoying, which I am, I would point out that Ameless would have to chew the worms before giving them to his eagle.
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so, like ameless and his eagle have the same birthday. Wow, what a coincidence [img=thinking]
Then, after one last push, the newborn emperor-eagle finished smashing his shell and broke free of the egg it had been growing in.
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Technia dimmention traveler confirmed ?
-All that for what?! Just because he didn't like Techno !?" Rhetorically asked her son.
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At least he won the hide and seek. This ais a true alpha male in his prime ;)
-I'll never let that happen." assertively stated the boy "You don't understand the pain I felt that day, when he went out to buy milk and never came back. I truly thought I'd lost him." explained Sansoul as he clenched his fist in frustration "But now I've found him, he was hiding in the wardrobe!"
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Oop, my bad 😁
And before the boy could react a large red and white figure with a tall pointy red hat and an incredibly large brown bag that seemed to be containing a thousand gifts barged in and shouted:
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"the *old* tower"
And before the boy could react a large red and white figure with a tall pointy red hat and an incredibly large brown bag that seemed to be containing a thousand gifts barged in and shouted:
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I think you meant "since he *did* not *know*'
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