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thanks for the chapter, I have a new idea, if the MC uses a spell to the exterior of the bus he can electrify it making anyone that touches or hits with a sword gets a shock (can be deadly by how much electricity is put) since a bus is made of metal and the interior is made of rubber with little to no metal parts, the MC just need to isolate the engine and other parts so he has a defence for melees attacks.

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thanks for the chapter

thanks for the chapter, idk why but for me it would be better to make the slice of life chapters longer while managing the other of the length you are using since a slice of life chapter doesn't give much suspense to the viewers that the fighting ones (combat, political fight and assassinations) it may be because slice of life chapter are easy to predict so idk it's your choise

thanks for the chapter, it's good that you are making slices of life parts and not only travels and fights so they can grow their culture and emotions by living and interacting with everyone

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thanks for the chapter, good that the MC wants to grow emotionally so he can live in the future more easily, one thing is bugging me out do the ships come from any era or there are only modern ones? Another question does he have the chance to get a nuclear submarine with the nukes or without them?

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thanks for the chapter, I have a suggestion, you can make the MC buy a slave ( male or female doesn't matter) that has a lot of strength. You might ask why well how will he fix the bus fast if only he knows how, since a slave must follow the masters order it (since the gender is unknown) makes an excellent helping hand in fixing the bus while keeping the secret about the structure of the bus and it's weaknesses

thanks for the chapter, i would like to know why are you so interested in ship if it is possible

thanks for the chapter, question does the bus evolve or gets upgrades that need certain materials or action, example, the need to survive an ambush of 10+ enemy's with minimal damage to get the ability to upgrade the durability of the bus.

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thanks for the chapter it's a good book with a great story

no problem, Just take your time when writing since i saw people writer story in a hurry making the stories confusing since you don't know Who Is Who or what they are doing or talking about

thanks for the chapter. A suggestioni for you pick a notebook or anything tò writer in and writer a simplified versione of every chapter and for the next One that you are writing so you have can see the way of the story Is going. in the First few Pages write every character with a short description so you don't forget any character by mistake .

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Thanks for the chapter, hope you continue your book without problems. For the future if your book has a lot of chapters and you want to do a little vacation it's better if you pick a notebook in which you write the character inside the story in the first couple of pages with their role (protagonist, antagonist ect.)what is their job and a short physical description, then you can write a summary of the story going by chapter or chapters if they are the continue of the precedent chapter/s.

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A good chapter, that gives us a bit more information about the Demons, saying that they can control humans and monsters, maybe the Korda that wanted to kidnap the elves and the young girl with the skill of true eyes(I don't remember her name) was under control of the demon since with that skill she can know if someone is under control of a demon or if the demon is disguised as a human (there is nothing that says that demons can't disguise as humans). So I hope that the story continues to be this amazing, if you have problems in the product of chapters don't be afraid to ask for help.