TheCreator_

2yr

Replied to Mel_Aniv

Thanks :) really appreciate the feedback, rooting for you too!

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Sci-fi · TheCreator_

TheCreator_

2yr

Replied to vinthakadha

Hey! Thanks, all errors will be revised in the final draft of my book, hope you can look past them to the story beneath. Take care🌟

Time, as of late, seems to have a slow gravity like effect. As I wait for The Day where I take my seat at the center of society, each hour, day, week, month, and year I wait in anticipation seems to pull me down. At times, I can't help myself from daydreaming on the massive brass doors that lead to the Supreme Leader Chamber, here at Citadel, opening. Being hit with the roaring stomach-churning gust of wind from breaths, of select few, men and woman who are fortunate enough to be called Supreme Leaders. The history, the mystery, my destiny - at times starts to feel like a distant dream.

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Sci-fi · TheCreator_

TheCreator_

2yr

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Really good and creative. I love the writing style and language used in ch 1. Although the world building could use some work as I feel it’s more telling rather than showing (a good balance between the two still needs to be established), the story is fun and full of adventure

Escape From Paradise

Sci-fi · Ozymandias007i

TheCreator_

2yr

Replied to Luminous_Arcadian

Thank you so much for this really detailed review! Glad you liked it. I’ll definitely have all these points in mind in the future development of my book