Alph706

2yr

Posted

What can I say? there are only two chapters right now, so I'll just give a 5 star to help out the author. Will have to wait for more chapters before I can write a thorough review. By the way, imagine getting killed by a serial killer only to find that he has now become your slave, what would you make him do to vent your anger?😂

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Fantasy · trollkimggu134

Alph706

2yr

Replied to leoreview1

Man what's up with you? I see you everywhere posting the same thing!

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Fantasy · trollkimggu134

Alph706

2yr

Commented

The concept of making slaves/conpanions out of those you kill isn't a new concept tbh, but the one used here differs from others as it seems that the slaves wont be just emotionless puppets. let's see how it progresses.

ch 0 1 [First Slave]

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Alph706

2yr

Commented

These skill description though, lol.

-Agile Movement(Intermediate): Quick and flexible, could have made it big as an acrobat.

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Alph706

2yr

Commented

I feel the same about this novel, this book is up to no good!

"This book is up to no good!" He picked up the old book.

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Alph706

2yr

Commented

Yes, it was the latest Turbo destructo ll, doom wing edition.

"That thing, was that an aircraft? No it was too fast and too big for that!" He thought of the large behemoth.

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Alph706

2yr

Commented

Dragon??

A huge behemoth broke through the clouds at an insane speed and in a matter of seconds disappeared along the horizon.

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Fantasy · trollkimggu134

Alph706

2yr

Posted

Hello Author, I noticed thatbypu like to use quaint and rarely use words which do indeed give the novel a unique and flashy feel but I would advice you to not use them any further unless you can suddenly increase your writing skills by a large margin because using flashy words when your writing skills are not quite there yet will make it harder for you to keep up the 89 same pace and quality of the story. It will make it harder for you to explain certain scenarios without constantly referencing which will give important scenes a rigid feel. sincerely, a fellow aspiring writer.