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A calm air was absorbed by the schoolboy as he locked his eyes towards his step-parents: Uncle Sasaki who wore a greyish t-shirt and white short pants, Aunt Chisato and who wore a sunny yellow dress in front of him. Also, Hirata, who wore a pink t-shirt and black short pants that covered her knee, joined her parents with a bothersome expression
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well-tidy... rephrase
Unbeknownst to his left side, there was a tall old man with a tiger claw scarred face and single red hair that looked like a torch. He wore a well tidy, red gentleman suit and fakely coughed up. Sparror looked to the left in shock at the old man's presence.
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rephrase
Hatoshi put his hand down willingly after the moon watched him and a confident gaze turned around his body to the opposite side. He grabbed the chin and realization rang through his shocked eyes.
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A small red open door ramen restaurant that had the people eating in front of the cooking, had holographic sumo proudly presenting the bowl full of fresh worm-like noodles and other ingredients usual in Ramen, shone the neon light the most compared to others. Hatoshi and Yuna were occupied the two rectangular, wooden chairs closed to each other and stared at the empty bowl couple, sat on the elongated wooden table with satisfaction glaring after tasting their delicious ramens.
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*cooking
A small red open door ramen restaurant that had the people eating in front of the cooking, had holographic sumo proudly presenting the bowl full of fresh worm-like noodles and other ingredients usual in Ramen, shone the neon light the most compared to others. Hatoshi and Yuna were occupied the two rectangular, wooden chairs closed to each other and stared at the empty bowl couple, sat on the elongated wooden table with satisfaction glaring after tasting their delicious ramens.
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*second - overwhelming rephrase
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rephrase couple-shifted
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*seal - seat, rephrase
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if you wish not to go to school.......
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*faces; *repaired; *hatoshi - dropping
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maybe toning down a bit
Hatoshi took a very deep breath until his lung joined to go up and released air. He opened the clenching fist and a line of tears shredded from his seemingly determined looks.
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rephrased
Sparror Volume 1
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