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Bingo!
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Fantasy · Daniel_Lowe_9357
Ah, that would be a very specific and very important typo to catch in the long run. That's a bit of a story changer if Sol started to go that route. Thanks for the catch.
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Fantasy · Daniel_Lowe_9357
Unfortunately, it simply means natural camouflage in terms of them looking identical to rocks in an area entirely covered in rocks. If they aren't moving they look like the landscape. It isn't an actual passive ability. Good thinking though.
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Fantasy · Daniel_Lowe_9357
Yeah, I kind of decided to start this way because I wanted Sol to start the story tossed aside by the people around him and then I'd fill in the blanks along the way through him learning about the world because he's rather ignorant as well. So his initial thought would be the same as the reader, "Why am I here? Why me?" So we slowly learn things, but I can see why that's not everyone's cup of tea when I'm dropping you right into it and talking about it. I'll definitely take what you said into consideration, most of this was really rushed when I was writing because of the contest.
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Fantasy · Daniel_Lowe_9357
Typo, but thanks for catching that. Imagine that was just a monsters entire skill-set, that it ages.
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Fantasy · Daniel_Lowe_9357
She's not the most likeable character, not really intended to be. Still I'll think about how to clean up her entrance. Thank you for the thought, if you have a suggestion feel free to let me know.
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Fantasy · Daniel_Lowe_9357
He's desperate and she offered to help, in his panicked mind this is basically a positive reaction overall.
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Fantasy · Daniel_Lowe_9357
Ah, thanks I'll fix that.
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Fantasy · Daniel_Lowe_9357
Exactly.
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Fantasy · Daniel_Lowe_9357
I don't totally know what you mean. Just solid leather covering his body, with minor metal armor to keep from overweighing him. The bracers on his arms are to be used in battle to protect the face if he brings his arms up.
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Fantasy · Daniel_Lowe_9357
Not necessarily.
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Yep, sorry Blobert.
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Fantasy · Daniel_Lowe_9357
Blobert is certainly a charmer, but he doesn't like to be messed with. So watch your back.
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Nobody is having an easy time right now.
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Fantasy · Daniel_Lowe_9357
They're just really good people trying to help him out.
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Fantasy · Daniel_Lowe_9357
Honestly when I imagined my character carrying around a slime trying to sneak into the city I got brief flashes of Ash, I'm not going to lie.
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Fantasy · Daniel_Lowe_9357
That would work for some things, but not always. If a monster is fast enough to dodge or strong enough to escape the slime might not hold forever. Plus sometimes they are specifically trying to fight monsters, if you read a bit further you see he has reasons to hunt certain monsters.
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Fantasy · Daniel_Lowe_9357
He kind of just wanted to leave at that point. Plus it comes up later, I didn't forget it totally. But you're right at first I pretty much forgot about it, but later I wrote about it so I'd have to rewrite two chapters so I'm fine with him just wanting to leave because frankly I'd want to be done with her at that point as well.
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