Jason_Darte - Profile

I am still relatively new to writing and I would prefer if you could point out any mistakes there may be. dotdotdotdotdotdotdotdotdotdotdotdot

This is my first proper novel and would love to hear your feedback so I can improve.........................................................

Good story but I doubt we will see the system before the 40 chapters are done and I think the world background needs to be more detailed but other then that pretty good

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