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predictable

оооооо кощей бессмертный, петр шувалов

get well

Finally, finally, we have waited for the action!!! Hooray hooray

Ehhhhhh, I guess I'll just keep silent, but I'll silently hope that the author understands how much he disappointed

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaa, author, if you think you're being smart by doing cliffhangers one by one, then that's stupid. This could work in some TV series, but not in a book, these are different types of storytelling, and what works for TV series (game of thrones) does not work for books. there are a lot of storylines in game of thrones, just like in your story, they also go at the same time, but there the series lasts an hour, and you have a chapter for 5 minutes of reading. It doesn't work, it's not interesting to wait 2-3 days when you release a chapter with the continuation of one of the story lines.

Why is he so stupid? According to Dumbledore's behavior, it was clear for a long time that he would not leave Harry alone, so it was necessary to respond to Dumbledore's actions a long time ago, and not wait until a similar situation occurred

I think Daphne or one of his friends will win, and something bad will happen to them. In general, this tournament arch has already been tightened up a lot.

Ninja Fanfiction (pre-shcool)

I, of course, understand that in this way you want to show the influence of the dark arts on Alrik, but this will again turn into unnecessary drama for six months, just like the conflict with his sister. If yes, then it is again pointless, and if for a longer period, then it will seem like a drama and will not be so interesting. And it looks like this will be another abandoned fanfiction

everything is very simple, time flywheel

the trap plan is good, but you forget about the aurors who will come to the rescue and will also fall under the action of your traps, and this will only make it worse.

it should not be "You agree to become an ally of Axel Hunt", but "You agree to become part of Axel Hunt's harem".

to be honest, all this fighting/drama seems completely unnecessary for this story