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Don't worry, it will be heading to an extremely unexpected direction.

Thank you. I'm glad it left such a positive impact!

I hope so as well! I'm planning on taking my time to ensure quality :)

I will try keep this short and simple (cus I talk more than I need most of the time lol) It's a very good story! I don't see any real issues with it, and the only (small) thing I thought should be improved was not repeated again, so that is amazing. I enjoyed reading it and wasn't bored out. There are no grammatical mistakes I have seen so you can be assured that when reading it will be fluid. Dialogues are concise yet informational and descriptions are vivid. I did not feel like wasting my time after reading the chapters and do not regret it at all. Will I continue reading this? Definitely. Have I added it to my library? Of course. Seriously, this is a hidden gem. Don't be fooled by the lack of book cover or if you don't necessarily like the synopsis. This is better than most within its' group!

The plot seems well developed so far and the story has good potential. Dialogues are realistic and the writing is somewhat fluid. I must say, I like your writing style. It is almost perfect! And though it gives us readers information, does not dump info on us. It is concise, yet keeps us engaged and understanding of what is happening. The writing quality is also decent. On a final note, I must say the writing quality could EASILY be EXCELLENT with a few touches. Also, by making sure its' as good as possible, you won't lose readers, so I am genuinely trying to advise that you fix these (some) of the (major) issues for the beginning, just as examples. I have seen others include this in their reviews as well but gave no examples, so I will try my best to give examples so that you can pinpoint specific areas. For example, in the very first paragraph, these are probably the only three noteworthy things to change: "Could it be the stars which we all have upon?" We do not 'all have upon stars', this is probably a mistake because of quick typing. you mean: "Could it be the stars which we all look up upon?" or perhaps something else. In any case, currently, the meaning isn't very clear to the readers Secondly, "the mountain which stretch beyond the clouds"; I do not know whether you want this to be a singular mountain or mountains, but assuming its the latter, and based on context, I think this is what you mean: "the mountains which stretch beyond the clouds" or "the mountain which stretches beyond the clouds" (singular). This might seem simple that it says 'mountain' instead of having an 's' after, but when reading it ruins the fluidity of the text so the brain needs to pause and the reader is no longer as engaged. Finally, in the same first paragraph, it ends with: "They thought" and leaves it like that. I am not sure what this is supposed to mean, because the sentence is not finished, but I will assume it is a sentence you forgot to delete completely so I recommend removing it. I hope this helped! Just remember, one of the most, if not the most important thing when writing a story, is the beginning. The beginning will hook your reader. It is a kind of 'example' of how the rest of your story quality is like. Overall, based on what I read (till Chap 6) this is amazing and has huge potential!! Once again, just the small grammar mistakes which can be found here and there are the only issues. Good luck author!! I believe this will be one of the top novels soon! [I would rate this 4.8/5 but I cannot do that so I have done 5 star]

Excellent writing so there is no way I can give less than 4. However, I just found it boring.. extremely boring. I understood what was happening, and I'm an all for this genre, but I don't know what it is, I just couldn't get hooked. Perhaps it's the slow pacing? Or maybe it's the lack of background in the beginning. Like the characters are just shells, not connected with the read, so I feel no sympathy nor suspense for events. Though, it might be me, so I'll continue reading this lol (rn I'm chapter 3). Good luck w this, it has a huge potential