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Good author... if your novel only had as a reason as a hobby of yours, then without a doubt I would be encouraging you with this peculiar system that you present, after all you don't see many novels with that kind of premise. However, author..., when I saw you compete in the WSA 2022, then it is really questionable what theme you chose for your system, and not because it is a sin to write Simp stuff. If not to the type of audience that is going to be addressed, without further exaggeration, and many readers will not give your novel a chance, just because it has the title Simp. Then, in chapters 1 and 8, it is more than enough for several readers to abandon the novel, and even I felt uncomfortable in chapter 8. The reason was the interaction of Jack and Mary, their thoughts and actions do not match, not they are grounded and feel compelled for a later plot to follow. Then if I have to guess later Mary will regret it and then Jack will slap him with a reality that no longer needs her ("Sigh, that theme is already more than reused by several authors"), and with that I'm not saying that I forgive her; however, the previously established relationship is a headache for many readers. Now the question of characters we have a protagonist without self-esteem, with an inflated ego, Mary the typical naive heroine who later becomes the intriguing villain, Lucy the opportunistic girl, and in itself a large majority of readers will repudiate that type of background for your characters. Well author with that being said, unfortunately your premise is already doomed, as long as you can win, I just know that it will take extraordinary effort to make the Simp system enjoyable to read. Honestly, I wanted to rate this story 3 stars, but then I remembered that it's too early to give a review; however, I felt the need to write this, so in the form of support I decided to leave it 3.6, now I recommend reading it, well if you are a tolerant and calm person you may give it a try, but if you lack those two, then no, because you will take a bitter experience in these early chapters. As soon as all this is said, it's my personal opinion and if I'm wrong, just let me know in the answers section, I don't mean to offend anyone and all that, and good luck author with the competition.

Really when I saw the title it caught my attention, but even more so when I saw its rating. Unfortunately I am disappointed. The story is insipid, you don't feel any connection with the main character and the time jumps are overused, the battles are hardly felt, as far as the harem meh, if each one is useful in their own way, but they are so forgettable that I don't even know who is who anymore, after having paused the story for a couple of days. The system is perhaps the most redeemable since it is its point of originality, but it loses that potential with the way you narrate the story, although it is valid that it is in the third person, but you turn it into a series of mechanized events. Also why did you have to add the setting to your lucky looting system? ("Where they hunt the protagonist"), there was no need if your system was to create war dogs and not the other, for that I better read novels of the villain of destiny. The world background, at first, is interesting, but then it fades and I emphasize that it is due to the abuse of time jumps, which as a result only knows the organization of the protagonist as for the rest, it only leaves a vague idea. Well, and I have among others... now it's worth reading, it depends on the type of development you want, if you just like a story with bombardments of sometimes unnecessary information, well this novel is your thing, but if you want to connect with the story in yes, better turn around that this feels one-dimensional. Finally, author you have good ideas, but you have executed it poorly, in my honest opinion it would be best if you rewrite the story, because to be honest your story feels more like a school textbook than a novel itself.

Where do I start… the novel itself is not so bad as to be unreadable for all readers, but it does have several shortcomings: - Giving advantage of 3 wishes is not so bad, but only if this one had its own dream. The premise of his admiration and forced rivalry with Ash and I even dare to say he wants to be Ash 2.0 is in bad taste (You give him extraordinary advantages just to compete with a 10-year-old boy and this is just a normal person, honestly it gives a lot to want). - The character has lived 25 years in his previous life, but his sense of justice questions his metal maturity a lot, especially with those abilities that you have given him, one would expect him to gain greater security and cognitive intelligence, but you only get an insecure character (So for to give them those abilities if he is going to be the same as before he reincarnated). - I don't know why it's becoming a trend, the prototype of characters from Chinese novels in all the fan fiction I see. But please all men are enemies and women are maidens who fall in love easily(Really?)… On top of a Pokémon story where most of the content is white and at most gray in the original, you practically misconfigured all the characters from Pokémon, and that will be annoying for any anime fan, Ash a young master of nothing and Prof. Oak an evil master of a sect… you practically reset the characters and the only thing they have in common with the canon is only the name . - Forced plots… Until now I can't understand how the protagonist doesn't suspect anything that Prof. Oak was not what he seems (It would be justifiable if he was just an ordinary 11-year-old boy, but he is not like 36 years of mental age and above he has the 3 wishes that makes him OP), I mean his skills are for decoration? Prof. Oak gave him Zerora… But what if he was evil? Why just act when this trip is going? I see a plot armor, just to highlight the protagonist in the eventual crisis that will occur at some point. - Unique and legendary Pokémon... this wouldn't be a problem if your fan fiction was just a wish fulfillment, but this one follows Ash (Wouldn't it have been better to just give him an Eve or some common Pokémon?), legendary and unique are for a reason unique, right?... but here they lose all their value, and seem at most rare pokémon. - Crossover… I don't know what a "Classroom of the Elite" character does, and even if you put it in you may have added in the Crimson City School as a mini arc for your fan fiction, and if you plan to add a character from any other anime to the less take the trouble to put a suitable place that characterizes your anime. Having the following is personal: - It feels strange to give a Japanese approach to your character, why not make it an American, European or some citizenship where you feel familiar, because let's be honest I doubt very much that you are Japanese, and therefore you don't have his peculiar way of thinking at the moment to make their characters. - Tag R-18 and Harem at the age of 11 feels weird, and even when you say they mature faster. - The pace is too fast (many things at once, too little to understand the background of why things). My final conclusion that for a true anime fan I do not recommend reading it, if you just want to pass the time and you like fan fiction (Chinese approach) of OP characters and with drama (which I personally do not like) this is for you. Author I'm sorry to say I can't read this anymore, at least not how things developed, there were times I wanted to get out, but I wanted to give it a try, to see if there was a hint of change. Personally, I can rate your fan fiction with 3 stars at most, I hope that one day you make a good fan fiction that is more mature than this one, without much more goodbye.