See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza
ch 43 The future
Fantasy · Balthizar_Blake
See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza
ch 41 Down Time
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Solid Chapter
ch 38 Dog Fight
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love the chapters with fighting in it. the detail and imagery is top tier.
ch 37 Costly Mistake
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Added a character named Maeve, love it.
ch 32 New Gains
Fantasy · Balthizar_Blake
Colin should be referred to as Saint Valentine more often 😅
ch 29 You’re going to have to try harder than that
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Best chapter yet
ch 15 You’re going to have to try harder than that
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light chapter, after the last one, no real complaints
ch 0 9 Questions, and Answers
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Much more natural exposition, excellent
" For humans we have it easy. For the most part all of our insides look like this. These are our pathways linked between soul nexus points ending in our heart where the grand nexus is located. At certain points in the body like the stomach, brain, left, and right hands, left and right feet are major nexus points, the rest are minor nexus points. These are where soul energy is stored and then moved throughout our body. "
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This part feels... unnecessary (politely).
Kody re-opened the door, and shortly after the attendant walked in leaving Belross another cup.
Fantasy · Balthizar_Blake
while, the instructor kind of feels a little out of nowhere, this is a great comeback. it feels mostly well paced, and the dialogue feels natural. I do feel personally, that at 15 chapters in, you don't have to show the entire list of stats anymore. Just the ones relevant to the chapter.
ch 0 5 Instructor Kody
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See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza
ch 43 The future
Dog Fight : Chronicles Of Ashton
Fantasy · Balthizar_Blake