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This had potential to be pretty good. But it goes waaaaay to hard with the konoha bashing. Author turned basically all of Konoha into Danzo clones. Everyone is evil. The only people not being absolutely shit on and blamed for literally everything are the people the author personally likes and whoever he recruits for kumo lol

It wasn't the confession that was cringe, it was the mc's response with the harem stuff. Anyway, can you clarify some of the time travel shenanigans for me? My assumption is that the time travel stuff works like this: Mc decides to go through with his plan, then a version of him goes through with the plan and sends the info back. If that is true, then one version of the mc would flip the notebook to the next page and see nothing, because its his job to go through with it. So then why is the mc super confused when be sees nothing on the page on the 3rd or 4th attempt or whatever it was? Wouldn't he assume first it was his job to go through with the plan and send the info back? Also, if the plan succeeded, why would the guy that succeeded go "hell yeah everything worked on, anyway let's go back in time." Why wouldn't he stay? He already succeeded. Also couldn't he abuse this way more? Like, he knows plan whatever is gonna work, so he writes in his notebook for example: Go through with the plan and then send back the answers to tomorrows test in school. Or something like that, if it works like you showed can't he exploit it endlessly? Also worth mentioning: This might have already been answered in the original, but It's been a pretty long time since I read the original. And personally I think it's the authors job to remind the reader of things so you don't have to read the whole thing again just to understand what's going on.

3 things I don't like. 1. Mc is way too Gary stu. He is perfect, the best at everything and everyone loves him. 2. The time travel stuff at the beginning was so bad, time travel almost never makes sense in fiction and has plenty of paradoxes and it's the same here. 3. I had to drop it at ch22 where I died of cringe after he got confessed to and his response went something like "I love u too but I need a harem bro please" (I can't remember the exact words cux I've already repressed the memory)

This is stolen from: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/14016000/1/The-Saga-of-Tanya-the-Firebender If you want more chapters and to support of author go there

I can't take this seriously at all. I read the first 3 chapters and nothing makes any sense. The existence of an instant mind control jutsu that works on literally anyone and is impossible to guard against is just insanely dumb. And then the Uchiha clan leader just casually mind controls fucking nine tails instantly, so it's not even a shisui exclusive. And then there's how nine tails got free. From what I can tell, minato put his hand on kushina's back and then boom, tailed beast is out. Really? There exists and instant anti-jinchuriki technique that just bypasses any and all seals and shit? And this doesn't kill Kushina somehow, jinchuriki suddenlu losing their tailed beast? No problem she is ready to fight. And the fights too. Fugaku is about to stab Minato (how btw?? This is literally the yellow flash and all that was mentioned was that Fugaku was "too fast") and then Kushina appears to take the hit for him. But.. for kushina to appear in between them at the last second she had to have been beside them, and would be in a perfect position to idk, push Fugaku? Hit the outstretched arm? Literally anything? And then Minato wins and its written that the mind control on the nine tails is gone and then... Nothing. Minato talks with his kids, teleports away and presumably the nine tails is just fucking chilling. This is just so fucking dumb. Only 3 chapters in and there are more plot holes than Harry Potter