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Ben 10: 11000

TV · H3LI0S

Miles had no real desire to kill him, but he did have a strong desire to send Aaron to prison.

Marvel: I can Steal Abilities

Anime & Comics · StarGate

"No, good luck to you."

Game of Thrones: The Rise of the Cursed King

Book&Literature · papudepapus

Leading Makenzie to the front door of his house John was stopped when he felt a tug from his pant leg and looked down slightly to see Makenzie's childish figure shivering slightly as he asked John once again "John where is my father?" Hearing his question John again turned towards the front door and released another sigh before continuing forward into the kitchen where a blanket covered a corpse on the floor. The room was also filled with traces of burn marks. The wood cupboards burned black, and some directly disappeared into ash. As Makenzie arrived at the kitchen and saw the covered corpse, he suddenly found it impossible to breathe. Next to him John crouched in front of the cover and grabbed a corner before turning to look at Makenzie and saying, "Prepare yourself Ken." Immediately afterwards he lifted the sheet and under it in a burnt uniform lay his father burnt almost beyond recognition.

The Marvel-Overwatch Journey (old copy rewrite up)

Movies · TryingMyBest

A huge city was before my eyes with a lot of NPCs walking back and forth doing their things. I didn't see any players, hence removed my hood revealing my crown. I probably won't have another chance to do this in a while.

MMORPG: Rebirth of the Shadow Mage

Fantasy · Gurdon

"Don't bear your fangs at me, you overgrown child," he warned the dragon who was looking at him indignantly.

The Dragonwolf

Book&Literature · Gladiusx

Leading Makenzie to the front door of his house John was stopped when he felt a tug from his pant leg and looked down slightly to see Makenzie's childish figure shivering slightly as he asked John once again "John where is my father?" Hearing his question John again turned towards the front door and released another sigh before continuing forward into the kitchen where a blanket covered a corpse on the floor. The room was also filled with traces of burn marks. The wood cupboards burned black, and some directly disappeared into ash. As Makenzie arrived at the kitchen and saw the covered corpse, he suddenly found it impossible to breathe. Next to him John crouched in front of the cover and grabbed a corner before turning to look at Makenzie and saying, "Prepare yourself Ken." Immediately afterwards he lifted the sheet and under it in a burnt uniform lay his father burnt almost beyond recognition.

The Marvel-Overwatch Journey (old copy rewrite up)

Movies · TryingMyBest

shuris twin

Marvel: Ultimate Gacha System

Anime & Comics · Taeksi_Iskeat

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Reborn As Draco Malfoy: Lord Slytherin

Book&Literature · The_Book_Addict