I like the way you used to introduce the new dungeon layout to us, thank you for the chapter
ch 0 1 The Midgets got Taller
Fantasy · Frog_is_Foreal
Thanks for the chapter
ch 0 1 Returning Home
Fantasy · Frog_is_Foreal
Thanks for the chapter
ch 0 1 Execution of the Locals
Fantasy · Frog_is_Foreal
Thanks for the chapter
ch 0 1 Cornering a Chieftain
Fantasy · Frog_is_Foreal
Thanks for the chapter, the descriptions fit in nicely though sometimes they could be more concise, for example instead of saying there's a whole animal roasting, you could just say there's a pig roasting.... something like that
ch 0 1 Raiding a Goblin Tribe
Fantasy · Frog_is_Foreal
Jeez, that's a brutal idea. But in order for that to succed the oerson you're using it on would nedd enough iron or other netals in their body.... I don't know if the amount a normal human body has is enough. But it probably does
ch 0 1 Down a Trekked Path
Fantasy · Frog_is_Foreal
Thank you for he chapter An auxiliary chaptwr would definitely be nice to have
ch 0 1 Confronting an Alpha
Fantasy · Frog_is_Foreal
"There was no live present in or outside the water. Only plain water with some plants and rocks inside"
The trees slowly got smaller, meaning that a patch of grass was inevitable. The armor found itself in a small clearing with sunlight beaming down, with a small pond at its center. There was no life on top of it, nor anything noticeable around it. Just the water was there, with plant life and stones inside.
Fantasy · Frog_is_Foreal
Instead of "a patch of grass", " reaching the end of the tree line" might fit better
The trees slowly got smaller, meaning that a patch of grass was inevitable. The armor found itself in a small clearing with sunlight beaming down, with a small pond at its center. There was no life on top of it, nor anything noticeable around it. Just the water was there, with plant life and stones inside.
Fantasy · Frog_is_Foreal
Some simple grammar mistake, double it. Also I would perhaps write a sentence different. " It would get to see whatever resides in the forest soon enough." Something like that, I'm no expert myself mind you so please don't take my feedback to seriously
Going farther in, the armor took note on seeing some small birds nest on the tree branches, flying off when they noticed the armored giant approaching them a little too close to eye level. Ignoring it, the armor continued on as it saw more trees and dirt. Its pace remained constant, it it never sped up to see something. It would be eventually, so what was the rush?
Fantasy · Frog_is_Foreal
I appreciate the level of writing in the novel, compared to others it is far better. The idea of putting different accents in the different characters is a good way to peronalise them and make them seem more alive. I think you're doing an amazing job at describing what exactly is happening and not make the descriptions seem to monotonous. Thanks for the chapter
ch 0 1 Promoted to the Field
Fantasy · Frog_is_Foreal
Very good, didn't expect there to be rhe option of mordes leaving the dungeon. I don't know how smart that would be though considering it's a new dungeon and mordred is it's strongest defender. Anyway thanks fir the chapter
ch 0 1 Too Strong for the First Floor
Fantasy · Frog_is_Foreal
Absolutely amazing chapter, thank you
ch 0 1 Real Fights With Benefits
Fantasy · Frog_is_Foreal
Thanks for the chapter, a great fight scene
ch 0 1 Beatdown Town
For the Lord (Site switched)
Fantasy · Frog_is_Foreal