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by the way I deliberately sent this at chapter 4 as it's the one that pisses me of the most but you are getting good though

I'll change my review if I feel there is good enough a change, keep doing what you are doing author san

Well what can I say, this book is good work but... it's still not the best. I'm no hater but here me out on this one. *takes deep breath* Let's start with the world building, wonderful well structured up a point I would rate it five stars for it's realism but it's got an issue related to character design but that's for later. Update stability speaks for itself. Story development..., this is where things start to go down hill, the main thing about this novel is its magics-realism nature that was poorly done, the story makes no sense the amount of crimes committed by the mc is unreasonable and impossible, 85000 rape attempts? he could rape someone every day for all his life and still wouldn't reach it! come on author be practical, then there's the lack of professionalism in the first court thing that's so off putting like be honest, crucifixion ? I get that he's the ultimate evil but I think the judge could do better than that, ignoring the barbarism, and weird mindset required, history has had worse death sentences than that ignoring the modern ones too. I would go on but I leave that for character design Character design the worst of the bunch, your concept the ultimate evil person... but explain how he got caught? like how someone capable of commiting that much crime have that much evidence, finger prints from which year, too old to know about CCTV and since when did... I'll leave it at this. *sighs* you know it hurts because I love the concept of the book that much, but anyway this is My opinion do what you want, you can do better though

Deserves five stars but really needs an editor or proof reader, I offer both for free... if the Author wants that is.

Well the book seems nice, I give this much on first glance, I may change it later. The writing quality though... i mean it's grammatically accurate and seems well thought out but the style lacks a bit. it's time concept is faster than normal but no problem, but it is lacking a narrative element and is a bit bland, it seems like the dialogue is monotone and how there's a lack of proper overview perspective needs more focus and there... you get the point. but hey! writing is hard! just don't give up i look forward to your work

Hmm nice but that doesn't answer the question Do you want me to help you edit and proof read or not

really good but . Needs editing; I can do it for the author they want . reply and let me know

This could have been 5 stars but the writing is too bad... do you need an editor? I can do it for you want

Not bad this story is a breath of fresh air for anyone looking for non-cliche Isekai but just one little problem... is the MC male or female ? really can't tell at this point, but still nice a story.[img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it][img=Feeling it]

Lovely story I would have loved to rate 5 stars but the writing quality is to poor, the ai edit was better but I understand and support your choice so I think I can help you with editing , it would help you get the best of both worlds and I will do it for free so if the author gets this let me know