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Okay im confused. It seems like Fuhira has the upper hand here, i mean he hit him with the 'dark shadow' and sent him into bricks. So why is he 'weary' in the next line? Maybe a significant energy drop?
As Fuhira punched his brother, Aihara flew into the wall, breaking a few of the bricks. He came at Aihara again who shifted to the side quickly, evading the attack. He swung at Fuhira but he dodged it and then as a counterattack, sent a wave of thick shadow-like flames that took Aihara to the ceiling, breaking it in the process. Aihara fell back down and landed on his face. He quickly got up, narrowly avoiding another wave of Fuhira's attack.
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Also, is it a resheath? I feel like he's only pulled it out once so far, thus shouldn't it be a regular sheath?
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Fantasy · FlamingAcee
Caps here and i think comma after "If I wanted"
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Caps here and next line
Fuhira raised his voice, "Take another step and I'll put a bullet between your eyes like I did to your little pets".
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Fantasy · FlamingAcee
Oh sorry deadshot
Slightly worried, he looked down at his revolver and then back up at the hound. The hound leapt at him and he rolled underneath, picked up his revolver, turned around and fired two shots at the hound, hitting it in both eyes. It fell to the floor, lifeless.
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Fantasy · FlamingAcee
Is that still not painful? His skin still came off :(
He looked down at his arm and realised if not for the cybernetic implants, his arm would've come off. His skin was completely ripped off and the bare metal used to replace his bones was left in the open.
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Fantasy · FlamingAcee
Maybe it woulve been smarter to have Fuhira look through the keyhole with his infared before this, although he could lose his eye hat way.
Yagita put up her fingers, one at a time, signalling 1,2,3. Fuhira opened the door to the entrance quickly and Yagita stepped in quickly with her gun poised in front of her.
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Fantasy · FlamingAcee
Oh yeah thats so weird, and creepy
Yagita nodded and removed her pistol from its holster. As they both walked towards the entrance of the building, she thought to herself [Why would they call his phone and not the emergency services? Something is not right.]
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Caps here, 3rd line and 6th line
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'That's one of the cool things about being a cyborg. ' He pointed to his eyes, 'cybernetic eyes'
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Fantasy · FlamingAcee
This reminds me of Jill valentine from Resident evil but blonde
She was wearing a well fitted grey vest top and black jeans. [Damn, those are big. Maybe I could get used to her...] before he could finish his thought, she interrupted.
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Fantasy · FlamingAcee
You should also avoid sports or exercise and training that could make breathing difficult for you,*
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Fantasy · FlamingAcee
So far, this chapter is fire, actually, the whole tournament was fire. I enjoyed seeing the cast of colourful characters and their respective abilities. Keep it up for the actual academy! P.S I fw Shihata
Shihata smiled and nodded and went towards Ichisuda, who was waiting for her in one of the rings. This time, her head was held high.
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Fantasy · FlamingAcee
If she had fought fair*
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Fantasy · FlamingAcee
Okay, this chapter was fire too. I don't know why I didn't feel it last time. Low-key better than the last one. I loved the powers, they didn't seem too crazy especially since the characters still bothered to use guns and swords. I want to find out what Fuhira is. I'm guessing the 'dark shadow' power was passed down from his dad, who I will call Sahara for now. lol
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Fantasy · FlamingAcee