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TeodoraK
female LV 1A black tea addict, a polyglot, a xianxia fanatic and a scholar, I write twisted stories that fall within the genres of fantasy and magical realism.
2021-11-25 Joined GlobalBadges 4
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And the most intelligent, the most subtle, and generally the most interesting among all these men is the quiet and intellectual Satoru. Bonus points for glasses. [img=recommend]
Yin's hunch was correct. Satoru had begun an internal investigation of all the group members who frequented the mansion in the period before Yin kidnapped Naomi.
The Hacker Girl
Urban · Williane_M_P
Ok, now we have a dark-path cultivator on stage:) Sorry, could not hold back. I like that guy already.
And the moment the man stood in the center of the room, well below the light. Naomi stood alert to the mysterious figure of this tall, stocky man who exuded the scent of danger, with long black hair and amber eyes, white skin, and with a snake tattoo starting from his jaw and extending to his neck and disappearing under the formal clothes he wore.
The Hacker Girl
Urban · Williane_M_P
That escalated quickly.....
Tatsuo smiles and suddenly kisses, breaking Naomi's defenses who didn't understand anything from the beginning, and soon pulls herself together and bites Tatsuo's tongue who stops immediately and says:
The Hacker Girl
Urban · Williane_M_P
She did get in trouble, didn't she?:) For now, I am simply waiting to see how this situation resolves. I like the way you write tension.
"STOP!" Said the man wearing round glasses, who was sitting on the other side of the bench, shooting a cold, deadly glare at his companion."The boss said not to hurt her. And if you can't stand her chatter, put the gag in her mouth. But don't take the bag off her mind."
The Hacker Girl
Urban · Williane_M_P
The setting is something unexpected and I am very intrigued so far. I think you could use less exposition to explain Naomi's backstory and add some hints instead: her memories of her father's misbehavior, snippets of her life in Brazil. I think that you've revealed everything a bit too quickly. Anyway, I want to know where this goes.
ch 0 1 Chapter 01 - Start
The Hacker Girl
Urban · Williane_M_P
I am waiting for a slow grind and regular upgrades:)
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Reborn: To Live Again
Fantasy · Blue_Blitz
LitRPG vibes!!!! Yes, I already love this setting.
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Reborn: To Live Again
Fantasy · Blue_Blitz
The premise is great so far, although the protagonist is too much of a sacrificial lamb. I guess that her naivete is intentional. I hope she will become a badass in the future. Also, I hope the evil sister is not just evil, but actually has some compelling motives and inner struggles.
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Reborn: To Live Again
Fantasy · Blue_Blitz
Thank you for your thoughts. They are greatly appreciated.
Ok, moving ears are just cute.
"They're not humans...", Jericho whispered and Yon Zue's elf-like ears moved
Shiya, The Dreamer
Fantasy · Nabi_JJ
The magic system and the female characters keep me reading. Thanks:)
Shiya is losing her vision already. Luckily, she wasn't noticed by Xiao after regaining her consciousness a few minutes earlier before they arrive. The stone didn't react earlier too.
Shiya, The Dreamer
Fantasy · Nabi_JJ
I love the pacing of the story and the character ensemble. However, typos and constant jumps from past to present tense make the text difficult to read. These things are fixable with a good editing program.
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Shiya, The Dreamer
Fantasy · Nabi_JJ
I am just getting into the story and I already appreciate the care and attention you paid to worldbuilding. Taking into account the complexity of the setting, this narrative somehow manages to avoid expositions dumps. Although my knowledge of Hindu myths is not very deep, even I get many references and love the way you weave them into the story. Bonus points for character names. They are awesome so far. I've been searching for a fantasy read based on mythology and with lots of intrigues. And this seems to be it. Thanks a lot! Also, any potential romance is always a welcome:)
ch 0 5 Fighting The Lovely Rival- Part 3 [Surya]
RakhtaBhushan (Blood Ornament)- The Epic Saga
LGBT+ · FantasyBliss30
Just keep at it. You could first write a couple of drafts, then post things whenever you feel ready. Perhaps, more ideas will come to you as you go.
ch 0 1 A Burning Portrait in 11.5 Moon
An Estranged Collection of Excerpts
Fantasy · MrMoriLives
No. It's not. I actually like how you skip between timelines. That especially makes sense since we are talking about constant rebirths and readjustments. But I can do nothing with myself...I love the historical aesthetics.[img=recommend]
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Trash Fodder Is A Mad Scientist
Fantasy · TheGreat_GrandArch
TiredConstellation has the best loglines. Officially[img=recommend]
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Trash Fodder Is A Mad Scientist
Fantasy · TheGreat_GrandArch
The status interface is a bit unexpected, but I like the premise so far. I hope it won't go into the modern world, though.
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Trash Fodder Is A Mad Scientist
Fantasy · TheGreat_GrandArch
This is one of the rare romance stories that I would recommend even to those, who usually avoid the genre. Despite certain grammar mistakes, The Hacker Girl is easy to read and fun to follow. It will charm you with a cast of quirky characters and a vibrant setting. The main character gets kidnapped a bit too many times in the story (poor Naomi really should watch her back), but the mess she causes every time propels the narrative forward.
The Hacker Girl
Urban · Williane_M_P