I think it really needs a redo ... its okay but the wording is a bit on the blank side. Words like member and velvet opening are good to use so u capture ur audience with ur word play. The concept is good and having a raunchy beginning is nice to lure ur readers 😊
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Realistic · MonarchWorld
Throatily ... nice one
"No" she say throatily
Forbidden Desires
Fantasy · forlornshadows