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very bad it's not flash quirk in mha but flash story in mha the author try to adapt the story but it's more force the story. so many hole in the story that it's not possible in the world of mha and some time you have a chapter with just ≈ 15 ligne

good story, but character development has a good start and go totaly trash with harry become a dark edgy scum bully when he go to hogward. good fanfic but trashed by more and more bad choice the development or interaction with the other character

sorry but i will stop reading after 40+ chapter not necessery description just for word count more than half of every chapter you talk about something out of the story or a very long description of something simple nothing in the développement of character you talk of mystery or hidden poeple with something in their mind but you don't tell what it is ( 40+ chap, 7 or 9 character like this ) horrible gramar ( he or she, never the same name for the class or character) confuss time line ( start of chapter with a time skip for the next chapter read a flashback of the time skipped) original story but bad realisation

i think the problem it's not the slow développement of the history, but the "change nothing". i like this fanfic because of the chang of POV with the " human cant be strong" aspect . but you need to understand that, when you read a fanfic, you know the story and you want to see a change in this story. and it's good that you have not started the main plot ( mote chapter [img=recommend]) but it's frustrating to see all change in character, environnement, context... but the final we have the same story with minimal change because the OC average if you compare with the power needed to have a active mc. all we read actualy is a passive mc, so it's like we read the same story but with another POV.

story and événement forced. Bad développement of thé mc. action fast, dumb and wooden. mc overpowered but lose because the author need the mc to lose