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Honestly? You shouldn't call people wanting to control their story, we can't please everyone. Write what you think is best, don't feel pressured by random randoms who want to control what happens in your story. She's getting really good! At least, I like what I see so far and the expectations from when I started the story until this current chapter have not been disappointed.

Author, I confess that I feel sorry for how Po will be treated by the MC (based on his personality presented so far). Like, he was a civilian 1 month ago, it's bizarre how much he grew up basically "from scratch". I really hope he gets the love he deserves in this fic, since, in similar fics, he's simply thrown to the sidelines or played purely as comic relief.

Maybe it's the author playing with Tai Lung's POV being biased, and that things won't be 100% accurate or go as he expects? For example, something might happen in the future that makes this "creating a clan" plan irrelevant or impractical.

It's cool to see a strong character and all, but I really hope things don't go the way Tai Lung wants. You know those stories where everything the MC says and wants, he always achieves without any problems? I really hope that's not entirely the case here. But anyway, good chapter!

Seija***

Basically, she is already completely developed, we readers already have a clear idea of ​​who "Seika" is, her personality, her short-term goals and some actions she will take. That doesn't mean it's "cliché" or predictable, I for one am loving the turn of recent events, which is something I'm very excited to see unfold. As for the other reincarnators, we know almost nothing. We know some powers and some bits of their personalities, but you, as the author, have HUGE writing freedom about them. I specified Reincarnator 2 because it stands out among them, as you gave some details about it that gives us space to theorize with these few details, and I have MANY theories about it.

Author, I'm going to give this unpopular opinion and leave without elaborating: Reincarnator 2 (Senku) is the character with the most narrative potential so far.

You just forgot the part that appeared in the global chat that reincarnator 1 killed 15, if she tried to use that disguise, it would be discovered very quickly.

Good chapter. I just wanted to leave an addendum: In hentai in general, the bad endings usually happen when the WOMAN is blackmailed/hypnotized/cheats on her husband, who 99% of the time is not "enough" to satisfy her, as she is the woman in the relationship (assuming she ends up dating a boy, which I think is easier than ending up with a girl) she has a high chance of a "good ending", since she still has the system to help her. But it's just my opinion. Keep up the good work, author! <3

About the titles... If you want, you can adopt the scheme of numbering them only. It creates a bit of mystery about what the next chapter is hiding.

Thanks for the chapter ^^ Anyway, I agree with King_Young's comment above. The romance feels kind of pushed and rushed, also kind of unnatural. Vivian's forcing this into every possible interaction with the MC is also kind of exhausting, as we already know what she's going to do when she enters the scene. Try to make the romance more subtle, not so forced, more in the background. You are doing an excellent job so far. All other focuses besides romance are fair. After all, highlighting only the negative aspects discourages people a lot. The plot is having a good pace; the world building is being nice to see; the pokemon may have disappeared a bit lately, but that's forgivable because the focus isn't so much on them in these last few chapters; the reverence for the legendary and their importance in this fic is sensational, especially when we remember what might be happening to Tobias in this world; etc. Of course, this is just my opinion.

Was the Milotic that ate the scale male or female?

Thanks for the chapter ^^ Just now I realized that I'm reading one of the rare fic that don't put nicknames on pokemon.

There are some very interesting concepts there, I can think of two off the top of my head: one is an island where there are fruits that change the color of a pokemon to pink, regardless of the species, and another would be a submerged cave where there are Crystal Onix that can swim.

Tkx for the chapter! Any plans for Orre or the Orange Islands?