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Hey, first of all, great job, and thank you for the chapter/ chapters. I don't really like giving a formal review to a story when it is only at it's beginning but I'll give you a small one here. The story is interesting but I found a few issue's which it, first thing first, even after centuries of being an Angel, Goku doesn't seem to have changed on some crucial points, he still acts like a kid. (Which, to be fair, could be attributed to Goku just being Goku.) I personally would have liked it if he gained some maturity over certain themes like for example intercourse, the man had 2 kids, he should at the very least know what it is; furthermore, even though he is limiting his powers, he shouldn't be stressing over a confrontation which someone like Anissa, which he seems to be in your story. There is a similar issue, which Mark, he seems very optimistic even though he just went through a very traumatic experiment, and again, he acts like a child. I suggest you dedicate a scene or even a chapter of the story to explain why he has regained his child like enthusiasm. (The story of Invincible / Invincible takes a more mature turn after the confrontation which Levy, as Mark, is traumatized by it. I kind of find it sad that the story just passes over Mark's character development like nothing happened.). Overall, there is still room for improvement, so please don't abandon your story. Keep up the good work.

TFTC, the ending is a bit rushed but overall it was interesting.

TFTC, it was pretty interesting.