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It's a great Harry Potter fanfiction!! ๐Ÿ‘ It have a great storyline/plot and good english/translation.. The grammar is good too.. I like the daily life/slice of life of MC/Albert and his interaction with his friends.. And I think he should be in Ravenclaw (he's smart and full of questions.. A Ravenclaw quality) than in Gryffindor.. He's have a system, he can upgrade his skill with system and do his quest/mission.. But why there's not much appearence of his system?? What I hate about him is, why he take the horcrux (Ravenclaw Diadem) with him to his dorm after the first time he got alert from his system (when he almost be corrupt/influenced by the horcrux).. It dangerous not only for him, but also his friends.. He should stay so far away from horcrux (he still first year and can't have a way to destroy it now).. My interest to read this story is down to drain after he take the horcrux (Ravenclaw Diadem).. It's dissapointing to see he's smart and always cautious, but still so stupidly be corrupted/influenced by the horcrux (and he knows about how horcrux can and will try to influenced him, but still go near it).. And he know he's different (maybe be influenced by horcrux), but still not return it, or tell Dumbledore quickly.. I really love this story at first, but I don't know if I'll read more after this.. It's so frustating really, to see the stupidity of MC/Albert about the horcrux.. I hope you back to make MC/Albert like before.. He's focused to his school/lessons and friends.. And don't involve with horcrux matters.. ๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ™

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It's a very great and unique Harry Potter fanfiction!! I really really love it!!! ๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜ It have a great and interesting (although short) plot/storyline and quite good english/translation (you always use the opponent names when talk. Like Leo says "Hermione" when he talk with her, you can use "you" instead).. And grammar is good too.. I like how MC/Leonard is focus with his research then interfere with story.. I love how MC/Leo is friend with Hermione since before Hogwarts and later become lovers (not that I hate Ron, but Hermione is too good for him.. They so different, like fire and water).. I also like that this story show how Harry and Ron is many difficulties without Hermione with them.. It also so different from original story, like Philosopher Stone trial, Lupin and Sirius still alive, Hagrid fates, Umbridge dissapear (this is my favourites Umbridge fate from many other stories), etc.. There're many thinks I don't like about MC/Leo (like he's too cold/eliminate any his enemies. Love researching magic so much that he don't care about others, like he let Voldy ressurect to see the process. Etc).. Although I understand why he's like that (he's researcher and don't care what others think about him. He also don't know much about human psychology, like it's fine and normal for him, but not for others), I still don't like it.. I also agree with him so much about kill his enemies, so they don't come back to hurt his family, lover, and important person later.. There also don't much appearence of Harry in this story, he's like secondary/supporting character in this story (Dumbledore appear more than Harry in this story).. But I understand, because MC/Leo not have many interactions/encounter with Harry and Ron.. Love your story so much author sama ๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜

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It's a great and interesting Harry Potter fanfiction!! ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ˜ It have a great plot/storyline and good english/translation.. The grammar is good too.. I like that MC/Orion not op from start (he even weaker than other First Year when he go to Hogwarts).. I like his power (absorb other magical power/creature to make him stronger).. I also like his pet/familiar Red, is rare to see others phoenix beside Fawkes, hope to see/read Red more in the future.. The story is interesting too.. To see Merlin memory, magic power level, etc.. I like that he train Rune, Magic Bender, etc,, to supplement/protect himself from others (especially bully like Malfoy and his gang).. What make me dissapointed is MC/Orion as reincarnator have future knowledge, but why he doesn't changed many thing (like troll insident, Hagrid dragon egg, etc)?? I understand if he afraid to change so much, but little is fine I think.. And why he join Gryffindor?? If it just to know about the plot, it's failed, he often forget about important event like troll, etc.. He can go to Ravenclaw (he doesn't interest other house) instead, it will make the story more interesting.. Maybe make Hermione and Rose (I like genderbend Harry) join him in Ravenclaw.. Please make them his love interest ๐Ÿ˜ Who is Nick Iron?? Can't wait to see his reveal.. Love your story author san.. Keep up the great work ๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜

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