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Cool, may change my review later. As for [absolute mind], you could, y'know, make modifications to chapter 2 as well. Same for mentioning the [soul absorption] ability earlier. It's not abnormal for authors to take down all their current chapters when a rewrite is in the works as well, and quite frankly, for the best in terms of quality. That [soul absorption] thing definitely should be explained earlier rather than later as it's too much of a "WTF" for others to not bring up.

Seriously, what is with this site and it's dislike towards [Enter] to space out paragraphs? I know you can't do it in the comment section, but I'm pretty sure I was able to do it in reviews, and seen others do it too. Heck, I've seen authors do it in the comment section. Actually, I've done it before. A weird on and off thing going on sometimes.

Grammar could definitely use some work, but not bad enough to where it's easy to mentally auto correct. The first two chapters were great, but everything past that (currently 5 chapters excluding auxiliary) was terrible and needs a rewrite. The author has admitted to rushing, but that admission doesn't change the status quo. Rushing in the early stages especially is just overall bad for a story. There was absolutely no character development. Even if knowledge of their abilities were instilled into them (should have been more emphasized if that's the case), you'd still only expect the bare minimum and for there to be a few character development chapters on learning how to properly use them. But no, MC didn't do any of that. The [calm mind] part of the [absolute mind] also ruins character development and waters down any growing likeness towards said character. So there she was, spying so close to the Hidden Leaf walls near the gate and despite all her inexperience, wasn't found out. MC decides to use earphones during her first real fight. The author said to not take it to heart, but this isn't a comedy focused story. If it were, my thoughts on the matter would be different. If the author doesn't want to take their own story more seriously and more of a joke, why should the readers? It just hurts the story. Then there's the [soul absorption] ability. Where in the F did that come from!? this info was never conveyed to the readers. The [Singularity] ability is the only ability mentioned related to the soul, and it was not explained to work in such a way. An Otsutsuki ability? Chakura absorption, yeah, but that definitely isn't how it works. Quite frankly, it seems even more OP than Majin Buu's absorption ability, considering all you need is a touch. Again, a few character development chapters about the MC figuring out their abilities with some sort of explanations for the readers to work with would go a long way. This story had a lot of potential, but the rushing, [calm mind] and [soul absorption] ruined it. I especially think [soul absorption], a really easy path to power, would greatly shorten the life of most any story. The rushing also shows a lack of care. If the author did, they'd bite the bullet and not rush, at least to such an extent as they did. Really, despite all this, it's still interesting and I may continue reading, but it could have been much, much better if the first 2 chapters were anything to go by. Need to work on details more though and it'd be even better. Like subtle actions, expressions, and character appearance descriptions.