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It's perfectly fine. I have a habit of being too honest. So I'm serious when I say that you lost 1 star with me just on those mistakes (I personally use Microsoft Edge to fix it by making a pdf of my work and ask it to read it for me aloud). Overall, you did a really good job with it. An interesting idea and a pretty nice execution.

Before I go into any detail, I need to mention a few things..., for one, the book feels more like the author is writing it for themselves and not others, or they just don't care all that much about the readability. On average, it's like 0.7 spelling mistakes per paragraph and it can get tricky to guess at first sight, so it does sometimes break the immersion. The other thing is that, there was this one chapter (I just checked - chapter 6) at the beginning of the story introducing some new characters and then nothing more for more than 40 chapters. No mention, no obvious development in that area, it wasn't even a full chapter that was first dedicated to it.OK, fine. I'm good now, so let's get to the story, shall we?First of all, and something that personally got me interested, was the world building and the way author explained why you can't just pop a gun out of nowhere and "win the game". It's very intuitive and nicely weaved into the world. The background was also neatly put together without revealing too much.The story goes rather slow, but has enough action to keep you invested in the plot. And as we reach the plot I have a feeling (not a good one) that we will get some oh so worked to the bone MC's very tragic backstory... It wasn't introduced yet (I'm on chapter 51 right now), what it is, but there were some thing that made me think so and they also messed quite a bit with the image of the MC.At first as we are introduced to the MC and learn that they (author refers to the as "he" MOST of the time) are a dungeon, we are also told that they think they remember being human and some other things, but no spoiler... The point is that they discard that thought right the next second and we start to learn more about him in the light of something detached from the world of mortals, living in a different reality, in more ways than one, but then things happen and for some weird reason...Please consider, if you want to read ahead as it will be a teeny tiny spoiler.Please consider, if you want to read ahead as it will be a teeny tiny spoiler.Please consider, if you want to read ahead as it will be a teeny tiny spoiler....for some weird reason he just suddenly remembers that he ?was? ones a human, because he got a headache over having too many options about what to do (in all honesty, there were just two... it was just two options... and not really that complicated) and now our beloved MC is acting like a scared lil' ... I won't say it. Judge yourself. After a short moment, things are back to normal, but man, really?

Overall, a very well written story. The only real downsides I can see are small inconsistencies when it comes to names (people, techniques, places and so on) as well as the simple fact that there isn't all that much story to begin with.