His finger slid deeper inside her, where it began to skillfully stoke the heat. Maxi's lips latched onto his shoulder as sporadic moans bubbled up. Her limbs felt as though they were melting, and her nerves were so tightly strung that her body quivered at the smallest stimulation.
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She looked up at Riftan defiantly. "W-What… exactly have I done wrong?"
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Looking surprised, Riftan grabbed her shoulders. "Maxi, calm down."
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Recalling the overwhelming pleasure he gave her whenever he did so, Maxi looked up at him beseechingly. "Y-You don't have to be… gentle."
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Ruth took the seat opposite her. "Should I have bellowed that the great sorcerer Ruth has arrived?"
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She’s Eli’s sister? So she’s supposed to be marrying her brother?
He just didn't want to see in those desperate eyes. Those eyes reminded him or his mother. And the way she was trying to run away from him was making him uneasy.
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Google? I think you mean ogle
He was a piece of art and in different circumstances she would have googled him but now when he was talking about getting rid of her so calmly all she could see him as devil reincarnated and did not have the luxury to drool over his looks.
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The plot and concept of the book is good. There are some grammar issues and usage of wrong pronouns. Also the language keeps switching from 1st to 3rd person so it’s hard to follow
[hello, dear readers. i am a new writer here. so, i have no idea whether i am writing properly or not. so a few comments and suggestions are highly appreciated. thank you]
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They keep comparing her to their mother. Is she supposed to be their sister or something?
He just didn't want to see in those desperate eyes. Those eyes reminded him or his mother. And the way she was trying to run away from him was making him uneasy.
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"Uh… So…" Riftan stammered, shifting his eyes. "You heard her… She's not lending me to you."
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Riftan stood with his arms crossed and his brow furrowed. His head snapped toward Maxi as she called out. Four pairs of eyes simultaneously flew to her. Maxi briefly lost courage, but she quickly put on a determined face and squeezed between them.
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"Elliot, you're coming with us," Riftan interjected, promptly putting an end to their bickering. "I don't want these two anywhere near the village. I will not have the women of Anatol knocking on my door with their bastards."
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"He's right. Her ladyship also has the right to freely enjoy the festivities held in Anatol. You will only earn her scorn if you try to keep her cooped up, Commander."
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Went from breakfast to dinner and now lunch?
"That's a wonderful idea. Do not worry about lunch. I will book a table at Bernand's." the father nodded as he ate his lunch much more enthusiastically while Evelyn and Evangeline could only nod and laugh awkwardly.
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"But that's what you always say, even when you aren't," he replied coldly.
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This book is so hard to read! I Can’t follow whos talking bc the POV keeps changing!
The winds howled more as we started walking as if they were angry that we had disturbed their tranquility. I rubbed my arms too as I walked towards the graveyard I have gone to this early morning, and I could not believe it was night already. One day has passed in this strange place and yet she is still here with not even a single plan to get out of this place.
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Dang so rude 😂
"Have you read the letter?" he asked and tears started flowing from her eyes again.
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"Let me have you one more time."
Under the Oak Tree
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