A great chapter! I like the banter between the friends! I would just just the grammar to help the flow of your story.
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Full stop inside speech marks. “What you saying? I know.”
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Check you sentence here. It needs to be broken up a bit. How could he be so cruel as to leave me for someone else? I didn’t realise that I was sobbing until a little girl came and wiped my tears away. She bent down and whispered something in my ear…
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Friends do feel awkward in this situation!
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The way you capture emotion is really amazing.
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Just check your grammar on this line. The speech marks are in the wrong place.
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Yes, yes you will !!!
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Oh my goodness, you manage to capture emotion so well. It is like that, everything reminds you of them!
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Love the first chapter, really pulls on the heart strings. I would just check the editing on one or two parts. :)
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Sorry, please tell me to stop if you don’t want me to check things like that
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