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slowpokeChaos
male LV 11I believe in the saying that if you want to know someone, then read their work. ;) Join discord server to talk with me. https://discord.gg/ba8R4f3dqx
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I may have added the laughing emoji. but the question is serious
3) There will be no netorare in the novel. I'll even ask readers for their opinions in polls for certain scenes. The last thing I want is self inserting readers crying and bitching over useless things.
Villain Reborn: I Shall Dominate Them All
Fantasy · slowpokeChaos
Zhu Ying
u making it sound like the dude just discovered their deathbut previous paras implies something else ..?
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....I not i.also too much .... takes my immersion out.I understand what u are going for but repeating the words didn't achieve it
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on the floor*and I guess u missed so before that"so much that anyone would"
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no need to say 'indicating his old age' when u literally started with old man
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and what is it?
ch 0 1 Why Do You Have to Go Back?
Sacred System : Deviant Dragon's Whispers
Fantasy · slowpokeChaos
better use small demon instead of the name as mc still hasn't remembered the name
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Fantasy · Unsoph
even i don't know the meaning of coruscating. Of course by the sentence I can infer that coruscating can be shinning. Still better use simple, understandable words.
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Fantasy · Unsoph
'them' for streams of light? Doesn't make sense. Or the demon lord and Ruel are present? Make this more clear.
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Fantasy · Unsoph
scream is mostly high pitched voice and that breaks the imagination lol.
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Fantasy · Unsoph
ngl most reader will think that gargantuan is the swords name. better use huge. Also you use a lot of commas. I suggest keeping sentences short.
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Fantasy · Unsoph
better say stayed silent for a few moments
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Fantasy · Unsoph
power," said Ruel not full stop
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Fantasy · Unsoph
unfortunately didn't receive much readers and I am demotivated to write this.my upcoming story 'Return of Crimson Sword God' got better emotional first chap though.I love it.