Connor_Evans_8356

1yr

Posted

Amazing novel so far, really like the characters and the slow burn between the main love points, and the developing understanding of how you should love and care for someone you have feelings for and what is a healthy attitude to have

[BL] I became the Broken Third Son of a Count

LGBT+ · Rain_Corn

Connor_Evans_8356

1yr

Commented

"an" aroma "had" begun to spread.

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Xianxia: Why am I here?

Eastern · Aurora_Ryan

Connor_Evans_8356

1yr

Commented

"The heat was increased continuously for an hour and a half" this sentence makes greater sense

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Xianxia: Why am I here?

Eastern · Aurora_Ryan

Connor_Evans_8356

1yr

Commented

after completely "wrapping" them in mud ...

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Xianxia: Why am I here?

Eastern · Aurora_Ryan

Connor_Evans_8356

1yr

Commented

why always following? shouldn't he have noticed something was following, not always following?

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Xianxia: Why am I here?

Eastern · Aurora_Ryan

Connor_Evans_8356

1yr

Commented

pretty much "very" sunny right not. What fever ... the line regarding it being sunny doesn't quite work, saying it should be either 'its pretty sunny right now' or 'its very sunny right now' would work better