"an" aroma "had" begun to spread.
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"The heat was increased continuously for an hour and a half" this sentence makes greater sense
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after completely "wrapping" them in mud ...
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why always following? shouldn't he have noticed something was following, not always following?
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pretty much "very" sunny right not. What fever ... the line regarding it being sunny doesn't quite work, saying it should be either 'its pretty sunny right now' or 'its very sunny right now' would work better
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"please" sponsor me ...
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family permission "they" can't ...
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the group "took" down the royal family in one night, rumours were that ...
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why are "you"
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Amazing novel so far, really like the characters and the slow burn between the main love points, and the developing understanding of how you should love and care for someone you have feelings for and what is a healthy attitude to have
[BL] I became the Broken Third Son of a Count
LGBT+ · Rain_Corn