Are y trying to show you know a lot of big words? Your use of them takes away from the content and context of the plot. If you can not sit down and read the story to a 15 yoa person and they understand it your story will fail. I suggest you rewrite in simpler language. You have an intresting plot and story line.
ch 25 Chapter 25: Calloused palms
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Are y trying to show you know a lot of big words? Your use of them takes away from the content and context of the plot. If you can not sit down and read the story to a 15 yoa person and they understand it your story will fail. I suggest you rewrite in simpler language. You have an intresting plot and story line.
ch 25 Chapter 25: Calloused palms
Eros: The Forgotten God
Fantasy · Fyniccus