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PoV transition isn't a smooth unseen process for you. Mostly because you do it randomly and for no real reason. A good reason would be him getting knocked out and forcing a switch to another character. Going from third person to first person while your first person PoV character isn't unconscious isn't just silly... It's downright dumb for an author to do. It rips the reader out of the immersion.
"The atmosphere of this place is very different from anything I've experienced…" I spoke in a low voice.
My Three Wives Are Beautiful Vampires.
Fantasy · Victor_Weismann
I've figured out another thing that stops this story from being better. You're putting in random weeb scenarios here like you're trying to force this into being an anime. But for my griping, I'm not saying the story is bad. But it could be better.
Pepper looks at Siena with a cute expression, "...Of course I remember! Eto, Eto…" She started to panic.
My Three Wives Are Beautiful Vampires.
Fantasy · Victor_Weismann
Okay author... Why is it always the "collarbone"? You can't think of anything else in the area? Neck, shoulder, chest? Is it some weird preference of yours, or merely a lack of a fundamental author skill, diversifying?
ch 50 Chapter 50: Ruby and Victor.
My Three Wives Are Beautiful Vampires.
Fantasy · Victor_Weismann
Japanese spiritual magic as a simple explanation.
Kaguya looked at the fire neutrally approaching, "Onmyoujutsu, this is something rare these days."
My Three Wives Are Beautiful Vampires.
Fantasy · Victor_Weismann
DragonBall and Future Diary are 2 good anime. Throw in Angel Next Door and I'd happily watch only those 3.
"Hmm, it was the one anime with the alien that gets stronger and his hair changes color, and the pink-haired Yandere's anime," Leona said.
My Three Wives Are Beautiful Vampires.
Fantasy · Victor_Weismann
Mahiru was definitely portrayed perfectly in the anime.
ch 10 Mother Invades
The Angel Next Door Spoils Me Rotten Compete Edition
Realistic · Sir_Smurf
This guy probably thinks along the lines of "MC gets everything he needs no matter how improbable because duh"
"We need to hurry. I'm sure others are already heading there as we speak!" Jet exclaimed and dashed forward. The space around him twisted and warped, making it easier for him to move forward at fast speeds. As for Leon, he stuck to using Gravity magic to make himself lighter, and Wind magic to push himself forward, so he was easily able to match Jet's speed.
The Black Necromancer
Fantasy · Nilo_A
Aww. Cute little babies.
Queen Spider
The Black Necromancer
Fantasy · Nilo_A
Second queen did.
Further away from the two Obsidian Skeletons, Nedra was waging her own battle. Her form had expanded into a size that rivaled that of the now dead millipede queen. This was her so called 'battle form'. She had gained this form after her last race advancement, and it allowed her to possess two forms. One was her normal, standby form that allowed her to shrink her size to become very small. She was able to become as small as a basketball. The second form was her battle form which turned her into the many-legged monstrosity that she currently was.
The Black Necromancer
Fantasy · Nilo_A
Can't just accidentally make unique variations, oh no... /s
Health Points: 350
The Black Necromancer
Fantasy · Nilo_A
He did mention reading an ungodly amount of novels when he first reincarnated.
"I have a name for you. Your name will be Kaladin!"
The Black Necromancer
Fantasy · Nilo_A
Yea, he wanted to detract from her beauty to avoid horn dogging. Overdid it sure, but she's following programming. So since it's programed in, she's not likely to develop anything either, like a human could.
Winter stood up and muttered. "Alright. Give me some time to prepare." She then walked away and stepped out of the room.
I Can Claim Daily Rewards
Urban · Malignant
Well they are Artificial Life Forms. Can't expect a human like interaction.
Winter stood up and muttered. "Alright. Give me some time to prepare." She then walked away and stepped out of the room.
I Can Claim Daily Rewards
Urban · Malignant
No problem. I try to make stories I enjoy more pleasing to other English readers.
ch 40 Warning
I Can Claim Daily Rewards
Urban · Malignant
So, author, I do hope you grow out of the habit of making everything muttered soon. Muttering is not talking. At least not like you keep using it. To mutter is to speak low or under your breath, usually in annoyance or disgust. It's not meant to be heard by someone intentionally.
ch 40 Warning
I Can Claim Daily Rewards
Urban · Malignant
Okay I feel really bad for this dude. What's this from?
In front of him was a modern-style mansion with magnificent landscaping. The architecture exuded a sense of grandeur with tall ceilings and large windows.
I Can Claim Daily Rewards
Urban · Malignant
This is the Fire Spirit.
"All I know is what I've seen. Doubt anyone could get a good understanding that way. It's like that for my Flames. The only way to truly understand them, is to be the one producing them, to be the one there at their conception. To be the one there from their beginning." He explained
Reborn As An Evolving Monster
Fantasy · Adam_K47xx
Cats are less natural hunters, you are alluding to? At least most cats don't need to group up against their pet like nature's chumps. I mean lions do but they're the worst cat anyways. And dogs knowing affection isn't unique. Cats show a lot of affection if you treat them right. But if you don't treat them with the individual care they want, yeah, they're not that likeable. But dogs are so stupid you can mistreat them and they'll still wag their tail like retards. And ancient people were exceptionally cruel to everything. Makes sense they'd want a dumb dog over a cat who always respects itself and its health.
'I've thought about letting you go a lot since you lost most of your use. Ever since the Eighth Floor, you've been more of a burden than anything else. Don't disappoint me-'
Reborn As An Evolving Monster
Fantasy · Adam_K47xx
This is just a hunting party. Probably more wolves elsewhere.
After all, just 24 hours earlier, the Pack had managed to take down two "Tempest Saber-Toothed Tigers" at once.
Reborn As An Evolving Monster
Fantasy · Adam_K47xx
Dayum
Victor elaborated, "I mean, I have three wives that I love very much, a master who takes care of me in her weird way, and I have you." He smiled kindly.
My Three Wives Are Beautiful Vampires.
Fantasy · Victor_Weismann