Bhargabmali_qtp1

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improve the character

So, This is a Cliche Cultivation World

Eastern · Poet_Of_Deep_Chaos

Bhargabmali_qtp1

1yr

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The story's great, a very appreciatible writing quality, but needs improvement in character development.The world is great.He has room to grow..so I'll like if he makes some minor changes in the mc

So, This is a Cliche Cultivation World

Eastern · Poet_Of_Deep_Chaos

Bhargabmali_qtp1

1yr

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great job..well done, but brudar there are a few mistakes fix them and bada bum bada bamm.

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So, This is a Cliche Cultivation World

Eastern · Poet_Of_Deep_Chaos

Bhargabmali_qtp1

1yr

Commented

jumppp in prize 👌

1500000 XP for a Legendary ticket.]

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Eastern · Mystiks

Bhargabmali_qtp1

1yr

Commented

Can't believe he has a asian mom. If it would have been me and my mom her slippers would have on my face untill now.

"Alright, give me five minutes." He shouted.

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Eastern · Mystiks

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