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Hence, they were called the Snowy Mountain Range.
Fantasy · Crimson_ink
The Prologue is quite doesn't invoke much suspense. Add some mystery to hook more readers
ch 0 1 Prologue: The Great Sun Empire
Fantasy · Crimson_ink
This chapter could use some more dialogue and the principle, "Show rather than tell". Don't get me wrong, this chapter is already heart-felt but it would more heartfelt if the character is shown to do the things that has been told in this chapter. I think that will be a significant improvement.
ch 0 2 The Count of Wealth and Power!
Leveling Endlessly with the Strongest System!
Fantasy · Crimson_ink