Webnovel Author: Arirosiex - Novel Collection

I think you did a very good job showing the weariness. However, I would imagine that I wouldn't follow someone if they screamed "danger" to me. Maybe that's just me, though. And, gotcha! Seilo is likable, reminds me of a puppy, lol.

This is an adorable story, no lie. I adore seeing a mother's love for her child through thick and thin. I find the chapters to be well spaced out, and I think the plot has a steady pace. That, in itself, is a good plus. I am someone who personally doesn't like the whole "lord" or "master" ideal, so that threw me off a little bit. (Spoiler) I also feel a bit "eh" when it comes to how trusting the MC and Arya are. They blindly trusted a man who turned out to be evil, and I am not sure how realistic that would be. However, in itself, I find it to be very good. Will keep reading!

I quite like this story, but I have a lot of issues with the grammar and tenses. I feel that the author switches tenses a lot which makes things very complicated, and there are a lot of spelling and grammatical issues. Not enough commas, missed capitalization, incorrect capitalization, and some missing words. There are also a lot of awkward text exchanges between the characters, and I understand what the author is trying to get at, but the phrases feel so so so awkward. It isn't fluid, it isn't moving easily. I feel like the characters are relatable and entertaining, but I also feel there is a splash of character lore that can be introduced a lot slower. However, I do like Anastasia and Emily. They both are relatable (besides the med school part because haha I wish), and I think the pace of the story moves well. Will likely continue to read.

I think this story is okay. The descriptions are decent, but I felt that it jumped around a lot. We were going from one scene to the next without really having an exact ending to each scene, and I honestly started to get a little eh. The chapters are incredibly long, which can be a double edged sword. I think the author did an incredible job word count wise, but I feel that I got bored. The story and development is entertaining, but it takes too long to progress, and I felt we were watching over way too many characters at once.