Description. I like that.
The ground shook, and the sky trembled as lightning arced through the clouds. The crimson sky displayed a backdrop of death and war as two great Powers clash on a scale so massive the entire planet was on the brink of destruction. Up into the sky, a red sun was visible for all to see.
Fantasy · McCrunch
Eliminate the 'and' before the second 'months'.
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Fantasy · Sir_WendoS
It is a mixture if western and African writing influences. African novels also tend to have long paragraphs. If interested check out Chimamanda's books.
There is never truly any equality in life. This was something Helix, with a doubt, was very familiar with. Although people are born equal, their experiences draw a clear line between each of them. As he drove through the fog that clouded the road just as much as his thought did his mind, he let out a sigh. No one had warned him that growing up wouldn't solve any of his problems. Running away from them did little to change what was happening as they turned out to be more tenacious than he had initially anticipated.
Action · Winnie_jazella1
The story is quite well thought out. You seem to have a firm grip on the plot you desire and I am sure you will be able to continue executing it efficiently.
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Just heard Selena singing this in my mind. Lol.
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Amazing start.
ch 0 1 Clichéd situation!
Eastern · MasterPizza
Suspense. I like that.
Regret. Relief. Hate. Love. Longing. Sadness. Happiness.
Eastern · MasterPizza
You got this sweetie.
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Fantasy · RomanceFanatic028
This isn't my first book, however, it will be my most authentic book. It is inspired by being a young adult( which I am currently). I will be showing everyone a glimpse of being a young adult in Africa.