Winnie_jazella1

1mth

Posted

This isn't my first book, however, it will be my most authentic book. It is inspired by being a young adult( which I am currently). I will be showing everyone a glimpse of being a young adult in Africa.

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Winnie_jazella1

1mth

Commented

I just started this on a whim today.

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Winnie_jazella1

1yr

Posted

Congrats on embarking on this journey. Your book is shockingly vey impressive and it has a lot of potential to grow further. As an author I wish you all the best.

Ten things my best friend does not know about me

Teen · Dinessu

Winnie_jazella1

1yr

Posted

Your start was quite captivating and wonderfully done. I support your writing as I believe it is one of kind given that your start is lovable.

Echoes of the Lost age

Fantasy · McCrunch

Winnie_jazella1

1yr

Commented

Good start, the scene throws us into the story immediately and familiarizes us with the plot.

ch 0 1 Prologue

Echoes of the Lost age

Fantasy · McCrunch

Winnie_jazella1

1yr

Commented

Description. I like that.

The ground shook, and the sky trembled as lightning arced through the clouds. The crimson sky displayed a backdrop of death and war as two great Powers clash on a scale so massive the entire planet was on the brink of destruction. Up into the sky, a red sun was visible for all to see.

Echoes of the Lost age

Fantasy · McCrunch

Winnie_jazella1

1yr

Posted

You story has a good plot and it is well thought of. I encourage you to think outside the box with words. This will help you in the long run as it will enable your readers to feel and relate better to your characters. You seem to be using a mixture of Eastern and western forms of paragraphing. I advice you to stick to one. I have really high hopes for this book.All the best.

A ghost within my heart

Fantasy · Sir_WendoS

Winnie_jazella1

1yr

Commented

Eliminate the 'and' before the second 'months'.

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A ghost within my heart

Fantasy · Sir_WendoS

Winnie_jazella1

1yr

Replied to MasterPizza

It is a mixture if western and African writing influences. African novels also tend to have long paragraphs. If interested check out Chimamanda's books.

There is never truly any equality in life. This was something Helix, with a doubt, was very familiar with. Although people are born equal, their experiences draw a clear line between each of them. As he drove through the fog that clouded the road just as much as his thought did his mind, he let out a sigh. No one had warned him that growing up wouldn't solve any of his problems. Running away from them did little to change what was happening as they turned out to be more tenacious than he had initially anticipated.

PRIDES

Action · Winnie_jazella1

Winnie_jazella1

1yr

Posted

The story is quite well thought out. You seem to have a firm grip on the plot you desire and I am sure you will be able to continue executing it efficiently.

CHECK SYNOPSIS FOR THE REAL ONE

LGBT+ · Kittylovely

Winnie_jazella1

1yr

Commented

Just heard Selena singing this in my mind. Lol.

The heart wants what it wants.

CHECK SYNOPSIS FOR THE REAL ONE

LGBT+ · Kittylovely

Winnie_jazella1

1yr

Posted

As an avid lover of words, the beginning was quite a treat . It seems like you have a talent for using words well, hence I urge you not to let go of it. Your setting is simple yet quite promising. You will go far.

DDLETK: Luck versus Damn

Eastern · MasterPizza

Winnie_jazella1

1yr

Commented

Amazing start.

ch 0 1 Clichéd situation!

DDLETK: Luck versus Damn

Eastern · MasterPizza

Winnie_jazella1

1yr

Commented

Suspense. I like that.

Regret. Relief. Hate. Love. Longing. Sadness. Happiness.

DDLETK: Luck versus Damn

Eastern · MasterPizza

Winnie_jazella1

1yr

Posted

The story is really captivating. Just recently started yet I am hooked to it. Your work will go far at this rate. Your writing style is fascinating and very enjoyable as well.