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as the uploader and translator you should change the MC's name from ''endless" to something common english name like "jake/john/billy".

MC name is "Endless" need i say more? what is next? is the MC going to named as "Fighting"? i know that the author is really a scumbag. but mr translator you should change the MC's name to "jake" or other commonly used english name.

yes the storyline there are some ideas that were brilliant but that is it nothing more than a few ideas. the writing quality is quite bad. the world background is bad. the character does not feel like a real human. maybe the character are all robots?

yes it feel more like the MC is a non living character because everything about the MC does not have human qualities. like emotion .

i am a fanatic of bleach. from what i can see here is this fanfic does not follow the bleach timeline. For example, the author states that Aizen is already a captain but Ichimaru gin have not become a shinigami yet. Based on the manga and the anime when Ichimaru Gin graduate from the academy and officially becomes a shinigami under Aizen. At that time Aizen is only a 5th seat in the squad/division. that the author does not have a good understanding about bleach OR the author is not an fluent in english. the author made the mistake of representing the Gotei squad/division as : Gotei 1 = first division, Gotei 2= second division, Gotei 3 =third division, Gotei 13 = 13th division.( THIS IS WRONG ) CORRECTION IS: Gotei 13 == ( means ALL division or squad from 1st-->13th division ) WQ = 3, >> needs more improvement. SoU= 3, SD= 3, >>many forced plot hole as SD. CD= 2,>> little to no self monologue/struggle as a transmigrator. WB=1,>>many wrong facts about bleach timeline and characters SHOULD be address as butterfly effects. Overall 2.4 stars. from start to finnish I dont feel like the MC is awed by being in the bleach's multiverse. There's no description in terms of scaling there is no writing to entice reader's excitement, fear probably it is like. arrived in bleach>>flirt at all women>>OP in academy>>...so on the lackluster part is theres no inner struggle/realistic person point of view to engage reader in the experience. normal human behavior that readers can relate to is "hesitation","fear","dissapointed", "hopefull", "facing the unknown" for example when trying to impress Yoruichi for the first time there should be internal struggle like frozen(hesitation) as if time had pause/slow motion while your thoughts are on overdrive hence came the idea of flower as gift ......l (inner struggle) but how am I even strong enough to shunpo and get things done in this timeframe? .... if there no system to help then just say something burst in MC soul like gundam seed suddenly acting on impulse or something OR Mc only realize everything after the act is completed while a few beads of sweat coming up with the idea on how to cover up the action with a few cringy lines to flirt would be better. that would be more engaging to readers.

since the author wrote that MC mother is indian and wrote that she can be more scary than thanos. I conclude that the MC will inherit the head wobbling culture. This..... this is a huge turnoff for me. I am not being racist or anything but sigh, this is not a stereotype but it is a fact how could the MC not have this since her indian mother is so strict thus I conclude that she made sure her son(MC) must inherit the head wobbling culture. this story could be a 8/10 but I really cant get rid the head wobbling MC from my imagination such that I tried to lie to myself that the MC wont wobble his head as means of communicating but I really cant. so 1/10 for reading experience. it would be better if he transmigrated to one of Rajinikanth's movies instead of marvel universe. That way I would accept the head wobbling.

first of all everyone is racist or against a stereotype by nature. don't believe me? for example IF, I repeat IF ...If the MC is set as a pedophile/communist then people who dislike the idea of a pedophile MC will have a hard time reading the writing. So this type of writing will limit the range of audience who can read your story. like me I am really against putting a certain race/country as MC's background. It really hurts me to imagine a hero/villain that wobbles his head as means of communicating because this is almost a fact as 99% of Indians do that as it is their culture. When you as a writer decide to use a certain race/country that has a stereotype you must understand that 'stereotype' exist and how it can effect the reader's experience. Just imagine if the MC is transmigrate to bollywood universe and he is a half-vietnamese , where his father is indian but his Vietnamese mother is set as a control freak with traditions. I highly doubt that it will attract any in indian readers because of the difference in culture.

the MC's name is Sage. The story dialogue can be really confusing especially when you are using read audio. the dialogue style is beginner level. if jiraya turns to sage mode and uses sage's chakra, what does that mean? is he turning into MC and using MC's chakra? i dont know what the author took to be so delusional when he said he didnt like the vegetable names from dragon ball but decided to use Sage as the name. sigh.