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The villainess shall be mine
Fantasy · Kepalozoid
I may be a little late in commenting, but this is really good. Since I am a basic reader though, I don't think I can suggest anything that can improve the writing. In my perspective, this doesn't seem to have any flaws whatsoever 👍
ch 0 2 Chapter-1 :The meet
The villainess and her Advisor conquers everything.
Eastern · latheef_shaik
Gotta use all synonyms available ig, never really understood why, but I think it somehow makes the story more appealing rather than seeing the word over and over again?
Dishes came quickly, Fionn tried them one by one, they were quite sumptuous.
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Fantasy · Transcended_being
Don't be too harsh, English doesn't seem to be the author's first language.
''Him, trusting you makes it easy, just hold him tight their" said Oliver, smiling.
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Fantasy · Transcended_being
Isn't Gin also supposed to be capitalized as it is also a name just like Fionn? Either way it isn't that bad
Unlike Fionn and his grandpa gin is used to waking up late, so they usually eat breakfast after he wakes up.
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Fantasy · Transcended_being
Just stop reading, you clearly have no idea how to understand any information you see. This making you upset about something that you are completely ignorant about.
"Ren Huang, I don't know what that is but stop it, right now. Destroy it and drag the cowards hiding inside this metal thing. Go…" Song Yun ordered his personal bodyguard to move as he had confidence in this expert. At the same time, after seeing the firepower in person, his suspicions about Mark being inside the vehicle grew more.
Weapon seller in the world of magic
Eastern · Snowstar
The soldiers that were stationed in the front, said in the last few paragraphs behind this One.
Mark and Allen encountered them. However, because of the carriage, they were let through.
Weapon seller in the world of magic
Eastern · Snowstar
Pretty sure those 'holes' you speak of are meant to be there to be learned at a later date. Please stop dogging the writer as if they have to be perfect just for you. The writer isn't a robot that writes these things, they are a living human with a life, something you don't seem to have.
"So, this one functions like a camera but not exactly one?" Mark thought its inventor is really a genius. The steps are too simple actually.
Weapon seller in the world of magic
Eastern · Snowstar
Because that is how it works. Makes sense right?
The lady who was in the realm of 6-circle picked up a paper and rushed towards them.
Weapon seller in the world of magic
Eastern · Snowstar
Because tanks are supposed to be invincible in a magical world where the power of the unnatural abilities are basically everything to not only to the society of mankind but also the world itself? Yes.
The lady who was in the realm of 6-circle picked up a paper and rushed towards them.
Weapon seller in the world of magic
Eastern · Snowstar
I'm wondering the same
Although that is true it might be some high-powered type solar energy panel that is a lot better than ones we have currently or something along the lines seeing how it is a whole android right here
Battle Craze: Able to fight nonstop while absorbing solar energy.
Weapon seller in the world of magic
Eastern · Snowstar
Earlier it said that he kept some of it as he doesn't trust the guild with all of it.
[In order for the Kobold boss's fire enchantment to be added to the Mighty Sword, the Kobold boss's gemstone is required. Add Kobold Boss's gemstone to Mighty Sword?] prompted the voice in Gray's head.
Sadistic Player In A Fantasy Game World
Fantasy · LordofKaizen
I mean he was surprised, meaning that he somehow wasn't expecting there to be a goblin on the other side of the door. Yeah Idk how this man let this happen.
*Aghrah* A dozen goblins plowed their spears through Gray's torso, catching him by surprise. Blood gushed from his stomach as the goblins stared at him with teary eyes, still shivering from fear.
Sadistic Player In A Fantasy Game World
Fantasy · LordofKaizen
It is solidified blood, the katana isn't in a liquid state because if that was the case then it wouldn't cut anything. When things solidify they tend to also look a tad different than when they were liquid.
Gray went rampant on the second floor, killing any goblins too slow to run into one of the classrooms, his katana becoming dull with blood.
Sadistic Player In A Fantasy Game World
Fantasy · LordofKaizen
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The villainess shall be mine
Fantasy · Kepalozoid