it's looking good but you should look up the proper way to use the word "and". I've noticed a lot of run on sentences. you need to figure that out. look it up on YouTube that will help I'm sure. gl
ch 0 2 Chapter 1: Good Morning Blacksmith
Anime & Comics · Mart_Lopez
wait what
ch 23 22- Hidden Mastermind or Depresso Expresso, Innocent Puppy?
Anime & Comics · No_Existence
it wasnt
"I don't know how his brain works, but I've never seen a human get strong without at the very least, having a system. Instead of becoming a gamer, the blonde bastard chose to rely on himself."
Anime & Comics · HolyGambler
looking good but if this becomes a harem I'm dropping it
ch 23 22- Hidden Mastermind or Depresso Expresso, Innocent Puppy?
Anime & Comics · No_Existence
9
ch 23 22- Hidden Mastermind or Depresso Expresso, Innocent Puppy?
Anime & Comics · No_Existence
Monika and cyberpunk
ch 23 22- Hidden Mastermind or Depresso Expresso, Innocent Puppy?
Anime & Comics · No_Existence
thx for the save il keep my distance from this story
thx for the chap
ch 22 21- Our Hero~...
Anime & Comics · No_Existence
yay new chap
ch 21 20- Just Cal... Wait What?
Anime & Comics · No_Existence
+!
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Anime & Comics · SleepySailor
i'm sorry for you Genshin player
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Anime & Comics · SleepySailor
noo I have to wait to read this master piece
ch 20 19- The Old Versus the New
Anime & Comics · No_Existence
this is one of the best piece of writing s I've ever read in my 3 years on this sight. well done keep up the good work
ch 19 18- *Insert Boss Music*
Anime & Comics · No_Existence
I agree
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Anime & Comics · SleepySailor
one more thing reading massive blocks of texts is off putting for most readers I suggest formatting your paragraphs into smaller more manageable chunk so the readers don't get lost when reading. Your's truly a concerned reader.
ch 0 2 Chapter 1: Good Morning Blacksmith
Blacksmith of hero society
Anime & Comics · Mart_Lopez