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Honestly one of the really good fanfics I have read in a while. The story is pleasant to read and gives off emotions while reading. The pace could be a bit faster but the different POVs also make it fun to read, I am glad other POVs don’t overwhelm Jon’s POV, it has a good balance. The details do add depth, the author doesn’t overwhelm with unnecessary details or words. The language and the writing part is very well done, nice and easy to read with good vocabulary. Really enjoying it, and hope to see more of it!

Honestly, it feels like a 10 year old is writing the story. The MC is dumb, and original characters were downgraded. The plot is the regular isekaid with good ol’ OP template, pretty much all overlord fanfics use the same template., and this one feels worse. It got annoying and cringe to read.

Is it a harem or 18+ fanfic?

Is this story dropped? It’s been a while since your last update. I was enjoying it quite a bit, I am looking forward to more! Please let me know author.

Yep! He deleted a lot of reviews that criticized his story, that’s why the ratings are so high.

Maaaan, I was really starting to like this story but there are are some major flaws that is being an obstacle to enjoy and cherish this story. First of all, way too verbose and too many words used to describe/explain things, it sometimes makes the explanation messy and confusing at times. And I get lost in it and have to read multiple times in order to figure some things out but even then it is not clear. Which leads to, info dump after info dump! Like waaaaay tooo much information and after reading 110 chapters all I can say most of it is irrelevant and doesn’t really add to the story but more like placeholders and blank shots. I felt like the author tried way too hard to make it complex and unique in order to give the story depth but it became way too much of mess and unnecessary information made the story a pain the butt to read. Does it have potential? Sure, but potential will remain potential if the author can’t convert it to kinetic energy. But the way author tries to convert Potential Energy to Kinetic Energy is unnecessarily complex and bulky making the story hard to enjoy.

Yes the system interface does pop out less as we go along in the story. But the thing is his mentality is totally a slave towards the system. He judges, decides and moves based on his skill(or should I say system) interfering with his life. Like the system doesn’t need to pop out for the readers to not notice that he makes a decision because he is afraid the system is going to interfere, thus the slave mentality towards the system. I feel like I haven’t seen much of his own personal freedom when it comes to his decision or choices. I don’t hate “divine intervention” and stuff but a story needs to have the mc be independent of at least making critical decisions or else it feels forced and out of hand.

I really wanted to like this story, I really did. I finally thought I found a good COTE fan fic, but man this story is getting on my nerves on almost every single chapter with how annoying the things are playing out and how forceful the story feels. The MC is a literal slave to the system, like no question about it. I feel like even black people have more freedom in US(from the civil war era) than the MC does. And because of this the story feels very forceful and predictable. I am going to pause reading for now, and in this future if it gets better I will come back to it. Good luck though.