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AngelFromSpace

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A touching homage to Reverend Insanity, and the author gives an admirable effort at replicating that immortal classic webnovel. Although it's not quite the same, I think it's a nice try! While the antihero's journey to achieve his ambitions can be compelling at times, some aspects feel too undeveloped and come across as a half-baked RI imitation. The overly edgy tone and heavy-handed philosophical musings may also come across as try-hard at times. Still, fans of cultivation stories with morally grey characters will likely find some entertainment value in following Louvain's lengthy journey. The plot moves at a decent pace and the protagonist's development, while somewhat cliched, shows glimpses of an interesting path of self-discovery amidst cruelty and self-interest. Overall, while not deeply original or memorable, this story shows promise for fans looking for an above-average tale of an antihero's ruthless pursuit of enlightenment through any means necessary. With some refinement and development of a more distinctive voice, future volumes could improve upon this and make it a unique work rather than just another book in this genre. Summary: The concept of pursuing an unattainable dream for 700 years has potential, though at times the edgy depiction of cruelty feels try-hard and the Mature MC who takes himself too seriously may come across as more comical than insightful. Still, fans of the genre will likely find something to enjoy in this standard tale that draws inspiration from classics of xianxia.

AngelFromSpace
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Good luck with the novel. Feedback: Be careful with grammar, there's a few decapitalized 'I's in there and some questionable grammar around dialogue tags. Maybe don't have these long, slightly didactic monologue chapters at the start. The guy's manifesto-lite takes up a large part of the chapter, plus this opening is slowish and lacks a clear hook. It might be useful to set the scene more clearly, the idea of beginning with a criminal is an interesting take on an RI-like opening, but it might help readers get a hang of this earlier by clearly delineating the situation with the man being a criminal facing execution. Also, speaking of 'all human cruelty' in this way comes across as a bit sweeping and not necessarily that vivid, there's not that much by way of specific detail that's particularly gripping or exciting here. In RI, I don't think that there was that much mystery about what was happening, the beginning made it quite clear what kind of immediate predicament Fang Yuan was in. Further, RI was blatantly drawing on the tropes of the genre and playing with them, portraying FY as the great villain who is being defeated, whereas I'm not sure that this novel is drawing on a specific archetype clearly and therefore its opening is much less evocative - especially given the lack of detail. This opening also doesn't have as much conflict as the RI opening, so there's less to keep WN readers

AngelFromSpace
Replied to Master_Atlest

What if they just wore blackface, would that be good enough for you? It's hard for ordinary people to transform into blacks, that's like changing species.

God, in His infinite kindness and wisdom, tells us that slaves should wholeheartedly serve their masters - who am I to disobey?

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AngelFromSpace
Replied to GP_Genius666

ALLAHU AKBAR!

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Better to be godless than have a 'god' who has you drink cow urine and eat literal dung.

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AngelFromSpace
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https: // i.imgur.com / ZoYggr3.png (remove spaces) for higher quality version, credit to Boundless_ and Anti.

[0] Reference image here, in the comments. It's not really an artwork of Aquinas Hall, since it doesn't have even half of the traits I described, but it should help your imagination. And yes, I chose [0] instead of [1] - what are you going to do about it?

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https: // i.imgur.com / ZoYggr3.png

"You should feel courage, from the Lord! His brethren, the people of Israel, were so enraged at Him that He was placed upon the cross. You should fear the wrath of God, and acknowledge your sin."

DxD: Blaze, Fire of Lust! (18+ Smut)

DxD: Blaze, Fire of Lust! (18+ Smut)

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AngelFromSpace
AngelFromSpace
Replied to FoodReviewSnake

Well written.

ch 42 Revered Magus Chapter 42 - Elise Zathis

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AngelFromSpace
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maybe

MC got a little heated at the end there. Tell me if I didn't portray the wrath well enough. Also, a 4,328 word chapter makes up for an accidental week of no chapters, right?

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AngelFromSpace
Replied to Outlier

Yeah, bro, I'm on her OF. More seriously, ty for your prayers and the great conversation, have a nice day nii gga.

To be honest, I don't use the ability at all. That's for two reasons: one, I don't actually know how; two, the amount of KBG informants in Moscow is ridiculous. Those fuckers snitch on anything they think the KGB would be interested in, and someone who looks like he's dabbling in witchcraft or something would definitely qualify.

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AngelFromSpace
Replied to Outlier

The semicolons in the paragraph you responded to were in a list. I think many authors overuse semicolons, including you, and this author isn't even close to being the worst offender. But I was just asking about this specific paragraph, since you replied to it with a comment about incorrect semicolon usage. Anyway, go and talk to the author about the chapter, since you apparently missed her comments earlier.

To be honest, I don't use the ability at all. That's for two reasons: one, I don't actually know how; two, the amount of KBG informants in Moscow is ridiculous. Those fuckers snitch on anything they think the KGB would be interested in, and someone who looks like he's dabbling in witchcraft or something would definitely qualify.

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AngelFromSpace
Replied to Outlier

What does that have to do with the subject? Are you conceding the point? The author has already tried to ask you about your comments, so if you wanted to talk to them then you could have done so. Why is your kvetching about semicolon use so important that only the author is allowed to confute it?

To be honest, I don't use the ability at all. That's for two reasons: one, I don't actually know how; two, the amount of KBG informants in Moscow is ridiculous. Those fuckers snitch on anything they think the KGB would be interested in, and someone who looks like he's dabbling in witchcraft or something would definitely qualify.

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AngelFromSpace
Replied to Outlier

You were complaining about semicolons. That's why we were discussing them. Using them inside a list is valid. It's difficult to understand your grammar, however, so what you're saying isn't always clear. Perhaps it would be worth writing legibly the next time you undertake to dispute grammar in a webnovel.

To be honest, I don't use the ability at all. That's for two reasons: one, I don't actually know how; two, the amount of KBG informants in Moscow is ridiculous. Those fuckers snitch on anything they think the KGB would be interested in, and someone who looks like he's dabbling in witchcraft or something would definitely qualify.

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AngelFromSpace
Replied to Outlier

Semicolons are used to divide items in lists, when there is already internal punctuation and so using commas would be impractical. I'm not sure what you mean about colons. They aren't used in the same way.

To be honest, I don't use the ability at all. That's for two reasons: one, I don't actually know how; two, the amount of KBG informants in Moscow is ridiculous. Those fuckers snitch on anything they think the KGB would be interested in, and someone who looks like he's dabbling in witchcraft or something would definitely qualify.

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AngelFromSpace
Replied to Outlier

Using the semicolon in lists is a valid use in English, given that there are already commas being used within each item of the list.

To be honest, I don't use the ability at all. That's for two reasons: one, I don't actually know how; two, the amount of KBG informants in Moscow is ridiculous. Those fuckers snitch on anything they think the KGB would be interested in, and someone who looks like he's dabbling in witchcraft or something would definitely qualify.

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