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I agree for the most part, but I would say that webnovel readers ‘atleast the ones that leave reviews’ are for the most part pretty stupid and seem to lack any taste and would prefer all stories be a mc op power trip fantasy where no characters get developed and there are no consequences at all through out the story.

Also wanted to add which I forgot to do before. The NTR tag is laughable as in my opinion the story takes a more realistic take on characters where everyone isn’t a Virgin to add to the MC’s 10+ women harem where the characters have nothing unique to them except hair color. The characters that truly matter don’t cuck mc (unless you count the lesbian acts with each other NTR) Which I don’t count as they don’t replace or overlap MC’s love as they all love each other as a big group relationship, with the exception of men except for the MC. Also the writer seems be writing out all the irrelevant women he has been getting it on with. Which makes me find the story more enjoyable, cause it doesn’t make sense for the mc to add every women he sleeps with to his harem if he doesn’t even love them. So I wished I was able to make two reviews to advise people of the misconception for the childish view of the characters presented in the story.

I get the challenge of writing especially when inexperienced so sorry if my responses came off as mean spirited. I am glad and admire that you are able to take constructive criticism and let it drive you to improve. I will be looking forward to seeing the improvement and hope to see you improve further as I read your work as you grow as a writer.

Yeah, so I do really enjoy the concept of the characters being more elaborate and such. It’s just when you make those characters do that all the time makes it come off as so boring and repetitive. Also you have mostly Kaze and sometimes other characters explain every thing for a event that isn’t even related to the world your building, so in turn takes up more word space. I would say more then half of the scenarios you can made can be conveyed to the reader without having to explain the whole story and the little things that the reader should be able to infer. Don’t get me wrong it is useful to explain some things about a character to establish their character traits and personality and what not, but after that’s established I feel like it doesn’t need to be done constantly for the reader to understand. I think this work is unique and great, I just personally feel as a reader that I am being treated as a idiot, as you have to explain each and every reason a character does what it does.

The story is really fun and the mc is the one-punch man op type, as the story relies on the other characters to show progression in their strength against the other foes whether that be the military or the cultivators from the other plane. Now what made me start to not like the story is the fact that the author has so explain EVERY LITTLE REASON to why the characters do what they do. This makes it hard for the reader to even make any conclusions on their own ruining quite a bit of the engagement in the story. It kind of feels like I am treated like a baby, and that I can’t come up with any conclusions on my own as if I was someone with 0 brain cells.

This story’s world looked really interesting, but then the author decided to ’rush’ through it and made everything he was building for around 160~ chapters crumble as he put in a random ‘plot twist’ retconned his whole world he was building with a multiverse plot line rushed ending. The story before it was rushed ending, looked to be built up to be a large and long plot that was generally intriguing, but alas the author either got bored or just decided it was time to end it.

I would think this was based off a manga if I didn’t know this was a webnovel. Loved this, I had a slight problem of reading it though. This whole story so far is very and I mean heavily inspired, that I thought it was a webnovel that it got adapted too if I was none the wiser. The manga I am talking about is Is My Reality a Love Game??

I really enjoy the writing of this story and the whole power working of all the elements, except death I find it a little weird for it to have its own element. There is nothing wrong with that and still makes the story find even when he gets the dark element mark as well, but my biggest problem I found was when he betrayed the Dark Church Origin Mark holder. Like it made no sense like mc said ‘I see that she looks down on me and sees me below her.’ But I have never seen that in the story and acts like a total dickweed for no reason to her after betraying her the mc makes this dumb decision out of nowhere and then he justifies it with “She looked down on me”? It makes no sense, like it seemed even the one got betrayed show more logical and realistic character traits of that moment. Idk this one moment really killed my whole liking of mc and killed my momentum, for now it’s dropped will pick back up in like a hundred chapters or if it finishes.

Bruh we about to have the same axis power from ww2 in the Middle ages and have chemical weapons?! plus it doesn’t need to have any type of fantasy powers. Except the gods but they just doing their thing and isekain/reincarnatin people.

Leo is a boring and undeveloped character, in comparison all the side characters have at least more depth to them then Leo which is sad when he is the mc.