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It started fine but had weird plot holes that utterly ruined it. The twist in regards to the mother would have been better executed if we didn't get a POV that contradicts the twist a few chapters before. The start of an author’s story is arguably the most important part and starting it off with this is not desirable. However, I can see potential with some of the characters in this world. For example, Thalia has a personality that I find quite enjoyable. So, the author’s talent does have a chance to prove my review obsolete.

Major and constant grammatical errors that could've been fixed with a free app like Grammarly. This is coupled with a main character whose backstory is filled with nonsense filler accomplishments. Overall I could see this having potential but for now, this is not worth the time.

This is my first time writhing a review and I feel the need to share my thoughts. This story is one of my favorites on this app so far and for a good reason. However there is one thing I would say that makes me mildly annoyed while reading this, the repeating of words and phrases. For example there have at least 6 mentions of how asking old people for information is the most reliable way to find the information you need. However that was just a mild annoyance for me and I greatly enjoyed this.