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i’m new to this review thing and stuff but from the general layout of the story is that it’s an interesting idea but when I was reading the first say 10 chapters I felt like grammar is all over the place. what that didn’t really stop me from reading but it was a hindrance in imagining the world that was being told in the story. I like the idea of the story it’s really interesting I don’t think I’ve ever seen anything like this besides those mobile games which is barely anything other than “conquer” and the other novels that are like this tend to execute the idea poorly but for this book it’s doing it cry well. this is just gonna be some of the stuff I want to see in the story: 1. A detailed map of Souta Kingdom, with all the villages and the capital fortress. 2. I think the villages should have names instead of being called Village A and Village B, in a situation like this I think it would be good to have names for let’s say logistics or anything involving communications or even just getting Intel from a village or outpost. 3. when I was reading the story there was a lot of references towards the moon, so I think a flag with the moon and the mountains in front of the moon would be really cool. And that’s all I have right now overall I’m enjoying your story and I do hope you continue it.

please continue this commissar so far I have enjoyed the idea of communism being introduce to this world, but make an ideology like fascism that response to to the rise of the communism just like how it was in history.