PhileaPhi - Profile

Vol.1 is enjoyable but rough around the edges. I would rework Tiana. She's too obvious/pushy for someone that's described as being good at manipulation. It's too clumsy and the motivation(Vol.2) for it is debatable or not explained enough. It feels like step 1 approach Lucy, step 2 gain Lucy trust with brain freeze, step 3 ???, step 4 profit. Her inner monologue would better be replaced by one for Mia thinking about Lucy. Lucy on the other hand should develop her relationships with Tiana and Mia more slowly. I get that Tiana manipulated her psyche, but after she got rid of it, she wasn't even the least bit sus. Only Tiana's inner dialog makes the reader think they're paranoid. Moving on... Somehow it got weird with Volume 2 (has 3 dead chapters - 246 is a duplicate of 245 and 282/286 is from ?another story?). The Story is all over the place and only tolerable until she comes back from the dungeon she was sucked into. Her System isn't updated/story-relevant? anymore and she's not even using the shop. Items seem to loose the spotlight too. Somehow she's also not gaining EXP anymore and random skills pop up at one point without introduction or was it just missing? The timeskip after getting out of the dungeon is just a mention of "It's been two months since..." and later we learn it should have been 2 years as Luc-ia tried making a baby for that long and after succeeding and the protagonist ?seemingly? isn't Lucy anymore but Ada(the baby)… At which point I dropped it. Oh but the smut is enjoyable ^^