I disagree, the sentence is fine already and your "adjustments" make it worse, stop being pretentious.
Light refracted off the clear water surrounding it, lighting up the tree line bordering the island's beach. It was fantastical, the island showing its untouched beauty.
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Very fun read! can't wait for more. The characters were very interesting and I cant wait to see how they will develop over the chapters. [img=recommend]
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I disagree, the sentence is fine already and your "adjustments" make it worse, stop being pretentious.
Light refracted off the clear water surrounding it, lighting up the tree line bordering the island's beach. It was fantastical, the island showing its untouched beauty.
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Fantasy · Enigma21